Reviews for The Cycle of Souls
Eve chapter 10 . 11/4/2012
OMG! Even if this story doesn't continue, you need to know that I laughed for like, to mins at the image I got in my head of a teenage Ulquorria blankly staring at a teenage Grimmjow, then suddenly shoving him down a flight of stairs. This is a great story. That made my day! Thank you!
Cedarchip chapter 6 . 5/16/2012
Ooh, Ulquiorra Sonido'd! (( if that's how you spell it… ))

And amazing job so far! I'm eager to read the rest. (:
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 6 . 12/6/2011
I do love Aleasha 3 I also love how Tsume and Tomoe dislike each other so much, yet seek each other out and hang around! It's like being allergic to perfume and yet still spraying it on XD

Mistakes Noted:

"Tomo/e/-chan?" she called to him with a worried look on her face, he hadn't responded and he seemed out of it.

Same caps issue found
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 5 . 12/6/2011
-points at self- I eat weird stuff

Chisaki-san is quiet not understanding-a very brash woman...poor Tsume...XD...I think he'd make it as an Okama...especially with the rabid yaoi fans out in this world XD

Mistakes:

Same caps issue...I thought I got those...it doesn't seem like I'd miss something that obivous ...*glares at reflection in screen* FML...I can't find those files!
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 4 . 12/6/2011
Alrighty,

I loved Fukami. It takes skill to write her interactions with others because of her disablity. She's a very meek and modest character when I first look at her comparable to her past.

On another note: Ichigo being a sort of bum on the floor is a classic XD

Mistakes Noted:

"...sitting at /the/ swamped..."

"Good Afternoon, Fukami-chan!" the transparent -caps lock the 'T'

I would go through the chapter because this is a repeated thing...that's the only issue I can find :)
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 3 . 12/4/2011
I like how the Hollow's cry triggers something deep within them; whether it's memory or instinct. I love it!

Onto Beta-Business! Mistakes Minor:

"Inoue-sans bosom"...not sure with the honorifics...but there's a missing " san's"

Do you feel okay?" the -just a caps issue

"Kanzenkiba!" a heavy hand laid itself upon his shoulder -same caps issue

"Then why are you here?" he asked bitterly. -caps issue
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 2 . 12/4/2011
I do love Tomoe's Kaa-san, she is indeed an awesome character. Despite her bad habits, she seems to be a very capable woman!

I like Tomoe's nickname's for Tsume...they make both the characters endearing!

Wonderful chapter!

As your Beta, I do plan to review your chapters! I've got my eyes open for missed mistakes!
NamelessxXxSoul chapter 9 . 12/2/2011
I was curious and dropped by!

I'm a bit shocked, most FF authors don't bother to use OCs, but I can tell that they're vital in your story. The effort you put into their personalities shows! It's amazing that they act like their Arrancar old self and yet, there's humanity blending in them.

What else...

I can't wait to see how you have Uluiqorra react once he fully remembers. I wonder if he would pursue her with his memories, or if he'll pursue her without his memories and have old and new memories clash?

Whatever happens! I'm exctied!

Stark and Lil' are so cute!

Apollo is a freak...Nnoitora is creepy .

Another note; I think your summary doesn't do your story justice!

Update when the need strikes!

NamelessxXxSoul
frawg360 chapter 9 . 12/1/2011
This story is so good! I am looking forward to the next chapters!
Nidia.Ceylon chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
This is my review...Great story and update!

J/K

I love the surreal-ness of the story. From the moment I first read, the setting seemed off because you were able to form a quick, emotional bond to your character. Seeing the setting from his eyes helped me identify that though the setting was familiar, it wasn’t right.

I am not familiar with Ulquiorra Cifer, but I do Orihime. Normally I don’t read a story about I don’t know, but I believe I could read your story just based upon the character introduction. I love how you’re beginning with a character and then using an OC to discover his identity. It not only helps draw readers who are too familiar and allows them to learn about Ulquiorra Cifer. It also allows you to explore your OC talent and get readers addicted to your writing style.

Once more, the story is surreal in the way you allow memories to come at him that seem familiar and yet unknown.

I like how he awakes and has to affirm who he is despite not denying the name he seems to remember.

Your grammar and spelling is wonder. Your sentence structure is well; maybe just watch the length and don’t forget to add commas and maybe delete unnecessary words. Keep the questions ‘would it read normal without this word’ or ‘can I reword this get a more concise meaning?’ It’s all up to you.

Example: “I knew that this creature…”

Maybe say: “I knew that creature…” or “I know this creature…”

Wonderful beginning!
K. Fang-sama chapter 9 . 4/23/2011
Nnoitora remembers but they dont, and Ulquiorra's mother was able to find him? gotta question if tht woman is wht she appears to b.

good work; only complaint ive got is tht there's no more chapters.
wwwicked chapter 9 . 10/18/2010
Please update soon! I just stumbled upon your story and I love it. The plot is so interesting.
Sadie.spotty chapter 9 . 10/15/2010
I really like your story! I hope you continue it.
Sadie.spotty chapter 1 . 10/14/2010
That was a great chapter!
honeybeeze chapter 8 . 10/10/2010
weirdly enough, I really like Fukami. Plus i like the added yazuka thing xD
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