|Reviews for What We Become|
| Jupplyr chapter 40 . 10/22/2011
I love this story I couldn't stop reading it once I started.
| 15stitches chapter 40 . 10/11/2011
Wow, Crisium, this story is absolutely phenomenal! I really enjoyed how you used the different P.O.V's. That really kept everything nice and interesting (awesome storyline aside ;) I really found Dog's the most amusing and fun. Aside from his, I liked Cullen's and Therrin's.
I find myself reading this story over and over again. The realism is off the charts. The emotions are strong and tangible. The characters, the likeness from the game.
Kudos, for sure! Added this (and you) to faves :D I will be checking back DAILY for sequels and such :)
| Rose Tinted Contact Lenses chapter 40 . 8/25/2011
*applause* Ah. Wonderfully, wonderfully done.
Thank goodness I did read it wrongly - that doesn't mean that watching Therrin and Alistair pick up the pieces of their relationship and come to terms with their new ones wasn't entertaining, however, and the nods to the Wardens' past, often subtly slipped in, were still heart-rending. Things moved on, they *didn't* do the whole "fall back in love, get married" thing, which was refreshing, and it all came to a very satisfying end.
I liked that you gave Alistair a likeable queen and also didn't make it a loveless marriage - perhaps it started out as such, but it doesn't seem to be now. Watching him settle into kingship and gradually become comfortable with his role was rather nice to read, and this one of the few fics I've read where he's portrayed as someone who has learned to wield his authority.
The growing relationship between Cullen and Therrin was lovely - very, very sweet - and even in its darkest moments - the demon attack, Cullen at rock-bottom in lyrium withdrawal - it left me looking forward to the next chapter.
Teagan and Leliana? Just... aww. Their happy ending in contrast to Eamon's bitterness worked perfectly.
This story made me laugh and cry for all the right reasons...
... Now to go and read the sequel. :)
| Rose Tinted Contact Lenses chapter 30 . 8/25/2011
Well, having read on, it *definitely* looks like Alistair is still more-than-half in love with Therrin. All the pettiness with Cullen and Zevran trying to defuse the situation was beautifully tragicomic, and the "She *has* a templar. It isn't *you*" line damn near broke my heart.
Maybe I'm *still* reading it wrong, but I'm starting to doubt it. I get the feeling this is going to get tangled...
| Rose Tinted Contact Lenses chapter 23 . 8/25/2011
Well, I've only just found this series (knew about it, had only read your shorter stuff), and it is *amazing*.
Everything, from the start in the bed to the end, is perfect, and the way you write both Alistair and Cullen is spot-on; there are no villains here, and I admit that I'm torn between cheering Cullen on and being saddened that Alistair/Therrin ended. I think you've got me cheering Cullen on. :)
I read "What We Were" before this, even though it's unfinished, for series canon, and that part about "you sound like my wife" and the re-introducing part had nostalgia from their relationship coming back in floods and my eyes watering... quite a lot, actually. Haven't read the rest of it yet, but, especially from their arguments and just that little scene, it sounds a lot like Alistair still loves her, which is just a bit heartbreaking. Maybe I'm wrong.
Better read on and find out...
| Monica21 chapter 14 . 8/20/2011
I love this story. DA2 Cullen really awakened my interest in him and I stumbled across this fic. I can't finish it tonight because you've already had me in tears several times and sometimes you just need sleep. You know those moments when you read something, something that you never expected to find in fanfic, of all places, and it just pulls at everything inside you? Well, you wrote, "We give up on days and live hour by hour, and if that does not work we live moment by moment, and if that does not work we live in the space from one breath to another. And with every breath you say 'I have not fallen yet, and yet, and yet.' And so we carry on when our hearts are broken and our spirits crushed and we are certain we can bear no more," and suddenly I have a very personal connection to this work.
Thank you for writing it, thank you for the excellent characterizations that keep them in-game but allow for growth, thank you for your excellent use of language and phrasing, but thank you most of all for giving me something I can take with me.
| MsBarrows chapter 22 . 7/21/2011
Started reading this earlier this evening and I just *KNOW* I'm going to be staying up all night, eyes getting grittier and grittier, until I finish it. I've been loving the whole thing, but chapter 22 in particular had me in tears for most of it (good tears!) because of how sweet and sad and GAH! it was all at the same time. I'm adoring this pairing of characters, I *love* how complex you've made them and their emotions and their world, and I'm greatly looking forward to charging on through the rest of it.
| Frankie in Like chapter 40 . 7/17/2011
Right now it is three in the morning and I can't write a proper review because I'm almost high from lack of sleep because I stayed up to finish reading this amazing amazing wonderful amazing story of yours. I will be back to write a better, more fitting review, later, but until then...
HOW ARE YOU SO AMAZING? This story... is pure awesome.
More feedback to come later, sleep calls :)
| Murphy AT chapter 40 . 7/1/2011
I haven't reviewed before now because I've been too busy pulling all-nighters reading your wonderful, addictive stories. My sleeping pattern is now permanently altered to include reading chapter after amazing chapter until 6 AM, when I then sleep for a few hours before continuing in the same pattern.
Well-written. Excellent use of imagery and the way you turn a run-on sentence into a work of art... Just brilliant. I adore the character development (so genuine and heartbreakingly realistic) and love the fact that each point of view has a unique voice. You weave subplots like Athena on crack. I love this story. I love it.
| Platinum Egoiste chapter 40 . 6/30/2011
Beautifully written. I am amazed at your devotion to this long (plus its sequel!) story. I'll admit there were times where I thought it dragged on a bit, but I am glad to have stuck it out. Your Cullen is reasonably in character, for the trials you have put him through and that is no easy task. Well done.
| BetaReject chapter 40 . 6/28/2011
I'm so glad you're doing a sequel to this piece. I have to say this is the best portrayal of Cullen/Amell's relationship that I've ever read. I love how you explore the complications of this relationship without ever candy-coating anything. I love how you explored his addiction to lyrium, the societal differences and the struggles that came with it.
I loved the innocence and yet maturity of their relationship. THis isn't just a flash i nthe pan sort of attraction there is a solid friendship, good okay maybe not good but mature communication, and a sincerity for one another's well-being. I do love how you made this relationship plausible and complex, realistic something one could see if such factions existed in the real world.
And on a side note my word! I ship Leliana and Teagan so hard now because of this tale! Once more I do love how endearing this relationship is and how is not entirely simple either. My favorite scene with these two was when she does that 'little man kicking him in the brow' with her fingers. That was such a bon-bon moment I was just a heap of goo...
Anyways just wanted to drop a note to say how appreciative I am that you took the time to write this tale and for continuing with it with the sequel.
| Eiovida chapter 40 . 5/18/2011
I've stayed up until 2:00 AM to 3:00 AM for the past three days and my job starts at 7:00 AM sharp. AKA I've lost quite a bit of sleep over this.
I regret absolutely nothing.
This is by far the best, most well written story I've ever read in the Dragon Age category. No joke. Everyone was so in-character and believable that I found myself wondering if you weren't actually one of the Dragon Age writers in disguise haha.
Your writing is strongly captivating and visual... and how quickly you made it too! I'm in awe that the quality of the story didn't suffer in the slightest. I honestly think you're my new writing idol.
Alright, I'm going to force myself to bed right now... but I can guarantee that I'll be joyfully tired at work tomorrow as I mill over this story in my head and I'm sure I'll be reading the sequel as soon as I get home.
| R2s Muse chapter 40 . 5/12/2011
Just lost several nights sleep getting completely drawn in to this series. Couldn't put it down! I fell for Cullen in DA2, and so was looking around for fic about him. So glad I started these... I'm a big AlistairWarden fan, but you did an amazing job of capturing how touching and bittersweet it would be for the Warden to have to move on from him. While I love the sweetness of Amell and Cullen's love story, the pain of her continuing interactions with Alistair just blew me away .. and broke my heart. So believable and beautiful. I'm now about half way through What We Choose, and rooting for the all around happy endings. Just adore your characterization of Cullen and pleased to see the evolution of their relationship and partnership.
| Lisa vas normandy chapter 40 . 4/18/2011
absolutly amazin, u shoud get paid for your talent. im glad to be readin about mages, my fave, i laughed, i cried, i couldnt put it down i think i had 8 hrs sleep in 3 days, brill
| Parad0xotaur chapter 14 . 4/7/2011
"One breath at a time, Leliana had told her once, after the Tower and Irving and Uldred. There are times when we cannot live from day to day, Amell, and she'd laced their fingers together and held on, murmuring comfort. We give up on days and live hour by hour, and if that does not work we live moment by moment, and if that does not work we live in the space from one breath to another. And with every breath you say 'I have not fallen yet, and yet, and yet.' And so we carry on when our hearts are broken and our spirits crushed and we are certain we can bear no more."
...and have successfully awoken in me to be a writer again.