Reviews for Undressing
Eva chapter 1 . 8/17
I liked it - a little short though.
kfnightwingrobin chapter 1 . 3/6
i like it you are good at writing
XxXxFallenArmyxXxX chapter 1 . 3/2
If you aren't going to say the actual words then don't write a lemon. It's really annoying seeing ** but other than that it's good
Rikku209 chapter 1 . 2/9
DragonFire Princess chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
Guest chapter 1 . 1/25/2014
Ciel isn't supposed to be all mushy-gushy he is supposed to be an ass, this was very OOC, but then again what FF isn't?
Any whore I think that your story is quite nice though I think it could use a bit more zesty LEMON! don't you think?
well then its goodbye for now but I think that you should write more.
hideyomitsuno chapter 1 . 12/31/2013
i love sebaciel fanfics. i just do. but i always find it rather odd when the author bleeps out the sexy/swear words...
ExaustedMetal chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
um...l like it but l don’t ship sebbyciel...sorry.
LuffyLover chapter 1 . 10/15/2013
Kind of fast, and you need to remember that Ciel was raped before meeting Sebastian, so he would know full and well what Sebastian was going to do. just saying.
Blue Crackle chapter 1 . 8/13/2013
You do know you don't need to * words out but either good one shot loved it
Guest chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
I am confused on how you can write a lemon but couldn't write the words blowjob and cum.. That makes no sense at all, it interrupted the flow of the story and the lemon was really rushed. Ciel is also OOC with the love declaration. This catogory is named M for a reason and it wasn't like no one knew what was going on all censoring the words did was interrupt the flow of the story. This is catogory is M for a reason you know.
8basketballdiva8 chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
Ciel is soo mean, especially to someone he loves!

Le squee! XD that was adorable. Personally, I don't know how hot, boy on man sex can be adorable, but you managed to make it happen. However the actual sex scene itself did move very, very quickly. If you were to pull it out just a tiny bit more, it would be so much more effective.

Good work overall!

Zinthr chapter 1 . 11/13/2011
Whats with the weird censoring things? XD
YetAnotherJanewayFan chapter 1 . 7/6/2011
That was HOT, but it was very hard to read. I had to highlight it because I kept reading the same line over and over again. I was very confusing... Could you space it out?

Other than that great job... :)
Su chapter 1 . 4/1/2011
really... with a profile like that, a nik like that, a PLOT like that (unadulterated PWP) how can you be skittish enough to put asterisks and not call things as they are? that just messes the flow, the cadence and the rhythm of your writing and our reading...

grow a bit or dedicate this team thing you have going to K-T writing...
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