|Reviews for Stork and Owl|
| doctorjay chapter 5 . 2/8/2010
I have never watched the show House, but your story makes me want to see it! Good characterization and dialogue. And three cheers for doing it in a foreign language!
| halogurl10 chapter 5 . 1/5/2010
your spelling and grammar have improved temendously.
it is very wilson-like to pick a fight with house and make a bet to get house to do something.
i don't really understand why wilson would be just know giving house pain meds. with the infraction the doctor would have given him something for the pain, plus meds for pt. but i guess you can think it as house has been taking pain meds and he ran out this is just the first time Wilson prescribed him something.
'Hopefully he had done the right thing.' if only wilson has a crystal ball and could see into the future...
have you read Of A Thursday BY sydedalus? it is an awesome fic centered around the infraction. if you haven't read it i recommend it.
| halogurl10 chapter 1 . 11/16/2009
p.s sorry forgot one thing.
physio in america is called Physical therapy most of the time it is shortened to pt. if you put physio us silly americans might not know what you mean. :)
| halogurl10 chapter 3 . 11/16/2009
your story seems to be pretty good. the only downfall is the spelling, the misspelling are pretty reduntant and repeatative. you keep making the same spelling mistakes over and over and it is taking away from the story.
probably is spelt with two b's and one p.
socialize and realize are both spelt with z's not c's.
each other is two words.
completely, there is no a.
either, eight is a number and there is no such thing as eighter.
there are a few more. it is okay to have a typo or two, but try to proofread and spellcheck, use a dictionary if you have to. fanfic provides these services for the writers and most typing programs do too, take advantage of it. if spelling isn't your strong point get a beta. they can read over the chapters and correct the mistakes. and watch out for misspell names too that doesn't sit well with most people.
try to avoid the big block paragraphs too. they tend to make the sentences blur together and they can get confusing. they can get tiresome to read too. especially if you have a lot of them and they are one after the other.
try to double space. especially between dialog,that will help avoid the block paragraphs, and don't forget to indent paragraphs.
p.s welcome to fanfic by the way. make sure to go through your profile pages and read everything it will explain betas and guidelines and such. it can help.