|Reviews for Deathly Choices|
| nasakelova chapter 10 . 6/30/2011
you know.. sometimes i hate my brother... why must deidara care to chikako? sorry, i just fought with my bro when i wrote this...
good job anyway, i don't like the brotherhood here, though..
| Red Lips 'nd Cloudy Eyes chapter 10 . 5/10/2011
* wipes tears away *
Gosh... nii-chan... you finished deathly choices... I'm so proud! I've never ever finished a fic before and there you go and surpass me in updating/finishing stories. My job here is done. You're free to go your own way now, grasshopper.
And Juri was freakin' awesome! Muhahaha! nice and cruel.
Juri: 'I'm not cruel!'
Juri:' no I'm not!'
what about those little ducklings the other day...?
Juri:' ... we agreed not to talk about that any more...'
* coughs *
well anyway, congratz on a fullgrown story! I'll drink my sisi to that!
| Red Lips 'nd Cloudy Eyes chapter 9 . 3/3/2011
YEAH! Juri, kill Deidara! WOOOOOOT! You go girl! And when you're done, you can just cuddle up to Kashi-kun I'm sure he can't resist you! XD He's just a man after all... ;-)
| princess-kally chapter 2 . 2/12/2011
Okay. So your writing is decent. Well, kinda. Its not exactly good, but its not exactly bad either. Mediocre, I guess. You don't have many spelling/grammar mistakes, and you paragraph your story, so thats good.
Your characters though... They feel somewhat OOC to me. Also... I didn't realise this story had an OC in it until chapter 2 (at least, I assume Chikako is an OC, considering I haven't seen her in canon...)
The biggest problem with your story is that you have no proper summary...
"Hi! Thanks for reading it, send a review please! Arigatou! D"
This tells your potential reader absolutely nothing about the story. Is it romance between Sai and Naruto? (you listed the characters as the two of them, plus the catergory as romance) Is it an OC story? What is the story even about to begin with?
You need to put in a brief overview of your story, so as to lure readers in. Otherwise, they'll just pass over it.
| nasakelova chapter 7 . 11/20/2010
okay, chikako-chan, sory for my late review that cuz i'm forget.
ehehehe, btw, how come chikako brother could be deidara? where u got that idea?
| nasakelova chapter 6 . 5/9/2010
good, update soon!
| Red Lips 'nd Cloudy Eyes chapter 6 . 3/28/2010
DEIDARA-KUN! Hahahhaa he's Chikako's freakin' brother! Oh, gotta love the guy! Where's Tobi? The two of them could make Deidara's life a living hell of annoyance.
It's not fair Juri get's to smoke cigarettes and I have to sit in my room without them. Life's not fair. Especially when kakashi's around ;-)
Luckily for me, you're there to advise me getting my own (real life) men.
'niwayz, great chapter! I could tell your muse was worling fine today...
| nasakelova chapter 5 . 12/12/2009
oh... what happen withsai actually?
| Kurisetina chapter 5 . 12/10/2009
W-Wow that's all i can think of.
| nasakelova chapter 4 . 12/5/2009
wow! that's almost close between chikako and sai hahaha naruto sure is annoying.. well, i'll know who is the man with the mask in the next chapter, right? Ehehehe... well, who is it? is it orochi? itachi? sasuke?
may be wrong...
good luck on your story! _
| nasakelova chapter 3 . 11/27/2009
wow, are they really in jail? well, i like these sentences in your story:
O my gosh, I am exploding!
i like the way you write it. hehehe
well, good luck on your story! _-
| nasakelova chapter 2 . 11/21/2009
who's the persons attacking chikako-chan? please update...kay?
| Red Lips 'nd Cloudy Eyes chapter 1 . 11/17/2009
Ops I was still logged in on your account when I wrote that review... It was mine... ;) sorry! my fault... I wanted to remove it, but I haven't figured it out how to do that... :p
| Cheville chapter 1 . 11/17/2009
I am so proud! :D Congratz on your first story! And I am your first reviewer! Wot!
I can't wait to read what's next! Especially since I will be the first person to read it :D:D:D I'm glad I was able to help you with some things... Any time Nii-chan!