|Reviews for Untouchable|
| Dantelover051386 chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
umm..dont be scared about posting this. it was very well wrote. er...I only thought her getting herself off on top of a dead guy...er...mildly werid. Ive heard of and read much more disturbing things. its sorta romantic in that weird special way that she didnt let his deadness keep from lovin him.
| auroraboralis chapter 1 . 11/30/2011
Desperate times call for desperate measures. Really tragic and so bittersweet. Well written!
| Erikajo chapter 1 . 10/12/2011
Very well written. :)
| fcat5761 chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
Wow I didn't see that coming, (his death) and I let expecting him to wake up. Once I realized he wasn't I realized how sad this was. Very intriguing and one if those stories that stays with you once you realize the implicatons of something like that happening on your own life. Thanks for sharing!
| jmrbear chapter 1 . 5/10/2011
I think this one shot is brilliant. It was deeply moving and you did a masterful job of conveying her loneliness and intense longing for the boy that was so far out of reach. Her choice to connect with him for the first and last time was tragic, as you've stated yourself 'uncomfortable', and yet you have written it with such sensitivity that my heart breaks for her.
| BrianaDwnCullen chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
Well...I'm speechless. And that's not an easy thing to do, lol.
Very interesting way to end it. Maybe it's wrong that I'm not really shocked by it? Or uncomfortable? Lol. Shocked in a good way. :)
Definitely puts a new light on when Bella tries to seduce Edward in Eclipse. Considering he's dead. Lol. That was just something that I hadn't really thought about (the fact that he's technically dead), until I came across your story. Lol.
Enjoyed it, nevertheless. I like trying to go outside of my comfort zone when writing. It shows what you can do. I think it's a good thing.
| FluffyLiz chapter 1 . 10/11/2010
Poignant, heartbreaking, tragic and oddly touching - these are the first thoughts which spring to mind. Yes, the whole premise of necrophilia is disturbing but, borne out of such a desperate longing as Bella's, it becomes deeply moving - her loss is so tangible and thus her actions, no matter how taboo, become almost understandable, if socially unacceptable. You walked a very thin line with this story, but you walked it well and unwaveringly, and ultimately it worked incredibly well.
| Lady Ramona chapter 1 . 8/25/2010
You did a really good job, Thank you.
| kaciemk chapter 1 . 7/18/2010
Okay I saw the warning but I had no idea that it would be so sad! I couldn't even read it all word for word or I'd definitely cry. It's just really depressing that Bella was that stuck on Edward (who seems like a total jerk btw) and they never even have a convo, he just dies [ It's very well written but too sad for me! I'm gonna read your other story when it's finished (I'm caught up in too many works in process right now lol) so hopefully it has a happier ending ] Despite the fact that I feel like I just watched a bunny gets killed slowly you are a talented writer! I want to end on a positive note ]
| vampireisthenewblack chapter 1 . 7/10/2010
I'm starting to wonder if there is something wrong with me, cos that didn't make me feel the slightest bit uncomfortable. But it's okay, I'm good with that ;)
Well done, it really was good.
| youngandmature chapter 1 . 2/27/2010
That was honestly touching. I didn't cry but it was heartfelt and you could feel the emotion. I know I sound creepy, but it's sad and very sweet because in her twisted kind of way she really did love him and he had to die without ever knowing.
Did Edward secretly like Bella or something like that? What happens to Bella in the future- were you to continue writing this? It's a hunch, but I'd guess the reason Edward drowned would have to do with activities him and Tanya got upto in the tub. He was probably going down on her, underwater for a small amount of time and she thrashed around and he knocked his head.
It's very depressing. I can't decide if I would have rathered her obsession to end with him happily because it's what makes the story, y'know? Just wondering, if I told you the main plot and it's similar to this without the death would you write it?
Btw, I am so glad because near the end I was thinking 'shit she's going to lose her virginity by raping him when he's dead.' So, I'm glad that didn't happen because it would turn the story from bittersweet to freaking scary as shit.
| 3diamonds chapter 1 . 1/26/2010
Definitely not what I expected. Creepy, but in a good way. My response? I covered my mouth out of shock and then started laughing.
| CynicalDreamerC chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
W-O-W. Different, lol, VERY different, but in a good way. :-) My jaw practically hit the floor when Alice said Edward was dead, was not expecting that! Well, thanks for sharing your stuff anyway!
| palasluna chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
| Snuze chapter 1 . 12/16/2009
Wow yeah that was disturbing ! I really like your style and the characters were very believable. Will be Reading more soon !