Reviews for Love's Entrapment
DayDreamer9 chapter 9 . 8/7/2016

You did an excellent job capturing everyone's emotions and the synergy was totally natural. Write what you know and you know your Momma Business ;) I felt all gooey at the love inlaid in this chapter

Now we move on to Alazne's reaction :3
yellow 14 chapter 9 . 8/7/2016
Give the kid a break, we ARE talking about first contact with a mother she has no memory of seeing. (Oh and Evie is going to stare. You're mummy, ergo the most important person in the world to her. They do that a lot. Bless) I'm loving the mother/daughter stuff here, it's really sweet. (I like the fact that she manages to goof up already, an entirely believeable reaction under the circumstances.) The next chapter should be fun. (I wonder if they're going to do anything that makes their parents suspect that a pair of shapeshifters have taken over;D) Keep updating
yellow 14 chapter 8 . 8/6/2016
Well, I'm sure you can dance plenty for both Evie and you;D (I forgot to mention this, but you watching the Olympics with Evie was a real awww moment.)

Now this next part should be...interesting to say the least. (And yeah, separating the twins like that is a pretty bad choice, but without that, no story!) Anyway, I can't wait to see how they manage to cope with being each other. (I wonder how long it'll take for the penny to drop? Or should that be dime?) It's not lying...well yes it is really. Just...on a bigger scale. (And it DOES make you wonder what EVERYONE ELSE was thinking when they let this happen) Keep updating
DayDreamer9 chapter 8 . 8/6/2016
DayDreamer9 chapter 7 . 8/6/2016
Squee! I'm Kal :D

Now it's starting to move into D'awwwww territory
yellow 14 chapter 7 . 8/5/2016
A most entertaining chapter. I love the whole frogs thing, very amusing. (Hop to it then) Also...martial arts can surpass culture easily enough. My ju-jitsu class is made up of people with a European background. (Even though it's Japanese and the forefather of Judo) My Tae-kwon do (A Korean discipline) has people of Indian descent in it. (Along with the majority of white people) so yeah, can't see any reason why Hay Lin can't learn Judo. Keep updating
yellow 14 chapter 6 . 8/3/2016
Hey I'm not bored here. This is definitely similar to the original in that respect though, but I like how they're all getting together (the girl choking was amusing though.) Keep updating
DayDreamer9 chapter 6 . 8/3/2016
I nearly started crying when I got to the end of this chapter ;-;

You did it again, Ells, you made a fantastic emotional chapter and...are you SURE Kal isn't the new Water Guardian? ;) Then again, Keepers DO have a connection with ALL the elements ;)

"cough" Anyway, I can't wait to see what'll happen next. Will they tell their friends? If anything, I'M reading this, so don't feel discouraged if not a lot of people are reading it, cuz I'll ALWAYS be your #1 Fan ;)
yellow 14 chapter 5 . 7/18/2016
This is running more than a little late, sorry Sokai. I actually read it when it came out, but didn't have the chance to review. However, now I've managed to catch up.

Anyway, onto the subject at hand. Looks like that relationship went downhill fast. In trouble on their first day no less! (I love how they insist that they aren't related, a most amusing in joke for the reader.) Oh I LOVE how Hay Lin is writing a compelling bestselling comic about 'Veil Guardians' Fourth wall looks more than a little shaky there;D

This should be fun, having the two stuck in the same cabin for the foreseeable future. Keep updating
DayDreamer9 chapter 5 . 7/17/2016
Hey, I'M reading this story and now I wanna read more! I like this story and I'm glad you skipped the pranks; they were mean-spirited and dumb. Straight to the main event and character exploration :)
DayDreamer9 chapter 4 . 7/15/2016
If she's not the next Water Guardian, then what's up with the 'unknown' force? Curious...

Sounds awesome, though, and makes me wanna see what comes next. Everything flowed so smooth, like it was right out of a book. I'm SO glad to have you back on FFnet _
DayDreamer9 chapter 3 . 7/11/2016
It's great to see you active on the site again, I've missed your rad stories :)

Irma in a nurturing role is so cute, as is her dynamic with Al. What will happen when the two twins meet, I wonder?
yellow 14 chapter 3 . 7/11/2016
And she's back! Really happy to see this Sokai my dear. Irma is great as a mum to be. (And surrogate mum to a rather...interesting girl. Also, I LOVE the fact that she's turned Ludo into a gambling game. Brilliant.) I have a feeling she'll meet her match soon enough. Keep updating and welcome back
yellow 14 chapter 2 . 11/27/2009
As far as hints go, that was really lacking in subtlety. (Short of big captital letters saying HINT, HINT.) I wish you all the best with your forthcoming nuptials. A scene taken more or less straight from the film, which was nice, but I like originality more. (Something I'm sure you'll rectify in future chapters.) Where are the other guardians in this fic, out of curiousity? Keep updating
XV-Dragon chapter 2 . 11/22/2009
Awsome chapter 2 Sokai, wonder if the two sisters will have the same reltionship as the two in the orgnal Parent Trap had? (mainly the kind where they pretty much 'wage war' until they were forced to bunk togthor and found out they were siblings)
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