|Reviews for Yes An End 'verse tale|
| Woman of Letters chapter 1 . 11/22/2015
Supernatural Fanfiction Monthly Award Review:
The originality of this idea and the surprise ending - that Sam was sent to the future not to change things for the better but for the worse - truly swept me away. You've taken the concept of the paradox and laden it with tragedy - in order for Dean and Sam to win, Sam has to endure the ultimate defeat. The realization of exactly what Sam is asking his older self for comes in slowly, as we relive the stories of what happened to Sam in 2009 that led him to his helpless solitude in 2012.
You interspersed past and present skillfully, building up the suspense of what the younger Sam was asking. Your characterization was on target, with both younger and older Sam - I could really see the Sam of 2012, with his rules and lack of emotion, no longer seeing the humanity in the monsters, the way the Sam of 2009 did. Saddest of all was the fact that the Dean of 2012 would never know of his brother's sacrifice, believing instead that Sam had simply given up and given in to Lucifer.
It was generally easy to keep the point-of-views of older and younger Sam straight. In one specific case - "Junior waited patiently. Why was he fucking crying?..." I got confused, as it seemed to me that older Sam was talking about younger Sam crying, when on reflection, older Sam was referring to himself. That was unclear. You might want to think about whether there's some way to rewrite that.
Overall, this story surprised me with its characterization and its skillful writing, and I enjoyed it far more than I normally do stories set in the timeline of "The End." I did have to make one leap of faith - while Castiel rescues Dean at the end of that episode, I don't believe he knows much about the future Zachariah was showing him, and in the script it seemed like Dean didn't tell him. I wouldn't expect Dean to tell him (like he didn't tell Sam), and this story presupposed a certain amount of knowledge by Castiel - so unless Castiel somehow listened in on 2014 angel radio, the premise seems slightly OOC for Dean. However, I'll make that leap of faith - let's assume Cas was listening in on the last ten minutes of the story - because the story itself was so beautifully done.
| SPN Mum chapter 1 . 11/20/2015
Supernatural Fan Fiction Monthly Awards Review: November 2015
I really liked that I did not know the reason Sam was brought to the future. I knew Sam had a message from Cas, but I had no clue that it was to ask Future Sam to say 'yes' to Lucifer, so that past Dean would see what a horrible decision it was to stay apart from Sam. Time travel can really mess with your head, can't it? lol The divisions between the timelines was very natural, and I never felt like one cut off the other. You did a wonderful job showing the differences between the two Sams, and I'm not sure which one was actually more of a survivor.
Even though a reason for Sam saying 'yes' to Lucifer was never given in the show, I really liked the reason you gave here. It made sense to me, that Cas would find out what Zachariah had done, and then would send Sam forward to change that Sam's mind, because Sam would otherwise NEVER have given in. That Winchester stubbornness has always been stronger in Sam, which is how he managed to leave his family and go to college.
Wonderful story and idea! I feel better about that 'fake' future that Zachariah showed Dean now.
| MeAzrael chapter 1 . 11/19/2015
Bloody Hell - totally loved your story. I found the link on Supernatural Fan Fiction Monthly Award - so glad I did. This bleak vision of the future always fascinated me - I haven't read many End'verse stories, but this is just perfect. I can see your older Sam clearly in my mind. It's what he would become, just like in that life the Trickster showed him. Alone, bitter, trying to be so cool about his past. But of course we're talking about Sam. He might do REALLY stupid things, but his love for Dean is almost as strong as the other way around. Great plot, great dialogue, great setting. It's still breaking my heart that he has to say yes - knowing full well what it mean to the Dean in THIS line of the future.
| TheYmp chapter 1 . 11/16/2015
I liked the idea of them engineering a way for Sam to say 'yes' so Dean gets his lesson without Sam ever really saying 'yes'. So did does that mean 'real' Sam never said 'yes'? It makes my head ache, but in a pleasant "just read a time travel story" way!
I wasn't sure how anyone apart from the Sams would have known about the voicemail, though.
You definitely gave us an insight into how Sam could have ended as a bitter loner, and it was interesting comparing how he speaks and how he sees his younger self.
| Catasauqua chapter 1 . 11/7/2015
Supernatural Fan Fiction Monthly Awards Review: November
I loved your descriptive phrasing. Nothing elevates the quality of a story more than the effort an author uses to avoid commonness.
2012!Sam was glorious hiding behind his bitter solitude and golden rule. Young Sam was in character for the situation. However, I didn't feel the recording was that big of an issue. That aside, it was definitely an enjoyable read.
Your story was well written and formatted and free of grammatical errors.
| lillelouis chapter 1 . 11/7/2014
| FlyingLovegood123 chapter 1 . 11/11/2013
This was a very interesting look-and blimey, Sam and Dean are so weird! I don't think it ever really hit me how weird they are until this story-Sam is willing to say yes so his past selves can say no. Hope that make sense in somebody's head!
| xXxShiniXKazexXx chapter 1 . 7/5/2010
This is excellent. )
| SciFi Girl chapter 1 . 3/13/2010
That was a great story! Oh do I ever wish that was a real script for SN. Great job! And don't worry about the paradoxes. Just think - quantum multi-verse. Two timelines, with different outcomes. It works. :)
| Zatnikatel chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
Very clever! I had to really concentrate to work this one out but yes: it makes perfect sense. I love how the future!Sam calls out to Mystery Spot Sam… he really doesn’t do well away from his brother and his denial of Dean is really hard to read.
Voicemail message I must admit is something I tend to de-emphasize since I don’t honestly think hearing the proper message would have stopped Sam: he was still [as far as he knew] going all out to save Dean and I think would have followed through on it. Nice to see him get the peace of mind that comes with knowing he heard a fake one though… I wonder if Show will ever grant him that?
| Amberdreams chapter 1 . 1/19/2010
Finally got round to reading this companion to Yes Too and what can I say. Very moving, you really put us right inside future Sam's head and in all that is unsaid and left implicit draw out his deep feelings for his brother - even after two years of hurt and not talking. And then to top it all with such a good explanation of why Sam would have eventually said Yes to Lucifer - brilliant. Makes Zachariah's meddling even worse really, doesn't it...
| Bundibird chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
I havent read a *jawdrop* story in ages, but this was one. Fecking awesome. Thats all there is to say. I was wondering where it was going, and i was wondering if past dean was actually lucifer -pretending- to be past sam, and i still couldnt see how you were going to make it work and then past-sam told the real-future to now-sam and i still didnt see where it was going and then he said "but for all this to happen, you need to say yes," and suddenly everything made sense.
Congratulations. You just made Bundibird's Jawdrop List. Very few people have ever made it to that list. I'm seriously impressed over here.
| asdfjkl chapter 1 . 1/5/2010
dang! thats cool xD
| kitsunechibiko chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Extremely smart. Never would have thought of that. Ever. And I love that episode. Cas was hilarious. Much luv.
| SciFi Girl chapter 1 . 12/26/2009
Don't worry about paradoxes and trouble with timelines - that was great! Too bad you don't write for the show. :)