don't know if you're still around or not, but i loved this shit as a kid and i still do. Appreciate the work you did for all the edgy little freaks out there. gettin blazed in this new year keepin up with my tradition of rereading your shit. you are remembered fondly. your mission has only just begun.

You're a horrible writer

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DAMN what a fucking read! that was so awesome! i totally forgot how amazing this story is! damn! honestly nothing like it! the humour was top notch, the fighting scenes, the serious parts, it is perfect! love it so much. thanks you for writing this epic, out of the world story!

Started out as something somewhat serious, turned into crack, eventually devolved into nonsensical word vomit.

Bruh... Toss that man a beer

This is shit ! Just like all naruto self insert trash. Always some oc with the cover of naruto. I still don't understant why character don't think the Whole Naruto Uzumaki name is just weird . Pathic crappy trash.

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i will agree about your thought on dark type stories. dark mc dark but forgive and forget

So shit smutt with no plot written by a shit author

"naruto sees sasuke as a brother".. Yeah, yeah that's what they say in canon too.. But the questions are: "WHY" and "HOW"? They've spent actually VERY little amounts of time around one another... They have NEVER helped each other(except MID combat, with a superior foe)... They have NO interests in common, they don't have ANYWHERE near the same experiences with the village, with families, with friends... Etc... NONE at all in common... Their training is NOTHING alike, hell they've BARELY "talked" to each other, IN ALL OF THE SERIES and movies PUT TOGETHER... In fact, if you wanna get "technical" with it.. They are BARELY above "complete strangers" to one another. But SOMEHOW (even canon is VERY VAGUE on this) "naruto sees sasuke as a brother"... It makes LITERALLY no sense. Add in, that the uchiha tried VERY hard to kill naruto already... And I just do NOT see it. Getting in a fight? That's one thing.. That's NORMAL for ninja.. Shoving a Chidori (assassination technique) through him TWICE? Then tossing him to drown? That's... Just no... But for SOME reason... Naruto says "to hell with my dream" and "screw EVERY single friend I've made, they apparently don't matter at all", "I'm bringing back this ONE person, whom I know NO BETTER then anyone else I've teamed with and who is the only one that tried to murder me twice, who has NO DESIRE AT ALL, to be in the village"... See? Makes no sense.

The jounnin of these stories have the ODDEST "work schedule"... What do I mean by that? Easy.. They ALWAYS are allowed to LOUNGE around, date, stalk underlings, sleep as long as they want, and apparently do whatever... And YET whenever there is a mission that needs done or something ACTUALLY happens in the village? "all the jounin are out on missions"... HOW? WHEN? They are CONSTANTLY "sleeping in" or "in a bar"... Or (for kakashi) "in the hospital"... So, how are they always working, IF THEY NEVER GO TO WORK? Kinda a "chicken and egg" problem here isn't it? How are they "always out on missions", if they never go to get missions, how can they go get missions, if they are ALWAYS f'ing off? Why are they always f'ing off, if they have no stress from doing anything?

And Tsunade FLIPS personality AGAIN... Why would she want naruto dead? She cares NOTHING AT ALL about the village... All she EVER wanted was to gamble and drink herself into the grave...I'm kinda getting whiplash from trying to follow tsunade's character... Hell, the necklace gets DESTROYED in canon and she couldn't give one flying fig about it. So anyway, yeah, Tsunade has now been at least 4 COMPLETELY different characters in this ONE story. Is it because you can't settle on what you WANT her to be? Or does it just keep changing chapter to chapter?

NORMALLY, people have ONE through-put on their personalities..Sometimes it's NOT a good one.. The third hokage for instance, is in general, thought of as an utter idiot... It comes through, even when he has a "flash of insight" in some stories, or he does his "brave thing" with orochi... But IN GENERAL, he's incompetent(HE even admits this, in canon, when rez'ed)... Tsunade USUALLY has "I really don't care about this", throughout.. But here, she's been... "canon, sneaky, spineless, angry, meek, fanatical to the village(that she ran away from willingly, wanted NOTHING to do with and was ONLY brought back because of naruto), compassionate, cruel and completely OBLIVIOUS to everything".. So it seems like your trying to shoehorn her into BOTH positions of "tsunade" AND "the third". Which is REALLY dumb, because she's ONE of the characters that AGREE that the third was an idiot. So they are REALLY conflicting personalities and they are causing OTHER personalities to be added in between.

Why is Rock Lee asking Tenten how she is doing this day? Didn't they JUST see each other, like 1 hour or so ago? They were racing with naruto, then naruto went to talk to negji, then naurto went to the shop and got with tenten.. Only for Rock to walk in like he hadn't seen her all day... It hasn't been THAT long. Do you often spend time with friends.. Leave to go get something and then go seeking them out again and ask them how they are doing today? After just leaving them? and Gai now wants a "team practice"? Wasn't that JUST what they were doing, before the race? How many "team practices" are done in a day?And why would you "practice, break off with each other, just to start practicing again"? It's kinda like one of those stories where naruto spends 99.9% of the story in the hokage's office... Its like, "if your going to be having him come back in like a hour, perhaps just have him STAY in the office. Give him a jutsu book or sealing book and sit him in a corner".

Well Danzo's person is told just "break in and kill the uchiha"... One of the things that kinda SHOWS danzo was not a TOTAL villain... The uchiha went traitor and Danzo decided to ELIMINATE him, so orochi couldn't get his eyes... This is TOTALLY A VIABLE option... This would be a VERY "normal" response to the uchiha's actions. This is KINDA what ALL Of them should have been doing. Think about it from a purely militaristic way... You bring the uchiha back...? THEN WHAT? Your going to have to keep him imprisoned and or mind controlled(for the rest of his life)... Any kids he has is going to have to be MONITORED CONTINUOUSLY... Orchi would be coming back for either him or his offspring... The rep of the clan is now COMPLETELY GONE... Itachi would be showing up (to get to the uchiha) and could tell the uchiha about the truth of the massacre, thus turning him and any offspring COMPLETELY against the village... There is just NO "logical", or "military" reason to bring him back, except maybe as a corpse. It's a very "odd" choice for the canon story wanting him back... (as it's NEVER hinted at before hand, or AFTERWARD, that it truly matters to the village) Just it matters to NARUTO.. (again for some BIZARRE reason, that doesn't even exist IN THIS story)

Ahh, Tsunade being Bi-Polar, isn't the only one huh? Naruto himself seems to be a bit "off", I get that he "grew up" mentally, but still, ALWAYS a walking "cliche'"? ALWAYS being a total ass? (you don't ask someone something and then interrupt them just to say you don't care, about what you JUST asked about)... I THINK naruto "grew up", but then he "backslides" into wrestlers' speak.. (you KNOW they don't really talk like that, right?).. So konoha's "brain rot" still seems to be affecting him intermittently.
Actually naruto IS NOT a "bastard", Kushina and Minato were married... So calling him one, over, and over and over... Is both TECHNICALLY wrong, and childish (again).