Reviews for Incomplete
Katluva0323 chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
Incredibly touching story. My heart aches for Edward and Bella. I must say, one of the most original and believable one shots that I've stumbled across. It is of course written beautifully, since it's YOUR story ;)

I must say that I think that he was guilty to an extent. I think he did kill the person, but he must of had some just reason for doing it. Though he might of had reasoning for it, he probably took it too far and that's why he ended up on death row.

I'm curious if I'm right, also if you had any decision if he was guilty or not when you were writing this. I would love to know. Please and thank you?

Exceptional story and good job. Keep up the mad writing skills D
Amalie1977 chapter 1 . 11/10/2010
Short, yet touching! Thanks,

Love Amy xxx
CarsonandMrs.Hughes4ever chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
A great story. Very well written.
team-hybrid8 chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
Yes. Maybe. Did he? Come on! I review spam ya daily. Tel meeeeee
Cyllaenoi chapter 1 . 9/2/2010
Wow, this story was amazing! I usually don't care much for twilight fanfiction, but Ohiowriter recommended this story, and I'm glad I listened to her. This is a brilliant work, and I honestly believe it could be considered original fiction if it wasn't for the names. Great job!
faint-of-hart chapter 1 . 9/2/2010
NO! omg i dont know why but i am crying so hard right now! gah:( but no i do not think he did it...
ohiowriter chapter 1 . 8/31/2010
I want to say that he didn't do it, but I am unsure. I think the mystery of it is part of what makes this story so great. Right now I am in Japan, thousands of miles from home and I'm feeling quiet lonely; so this particularly hit me. The pace the unfinished picture the emotions, I don't know how you fit it all into this small one shot but it all works together so well that I would have to say that this was one of the best (if not the best) one shot I've every read, and I haven't read too many because I for the most part prefer longer stories. Great job.

ohiowriter
AnonymousM chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
This is me doing what you requested and reading some of your other stories. XD

I'm not sure if he did it...but I liked this story. Really sad, but I loved it. So...did he do it? And did you draw the art for your picture on your profile? Is that why Edward likes charchoal drawing in here? I realize that this is more questions than feedback, but I'm a very curious person.

This story was really good. I don't know if awesome is an appropriate word considering the dark theme, but it is exceptional. :)
StrangeMindFiction chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
Awww! I'm totally crying right now! I don't think he did it, which makes the ending so much more horrible! But that was what made it so much more heart felt. It was an amazing story, I really enjoyed it :)

5*
keyecullen chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
OMG! That was the sadist story I have ever read that I can remember. Well, first off, Edward died. Ugh! Bless his heart, I don't know if he did it or not. I'm thinking if he did, he had a good reason to do so such as he was protecting someone. I could not imagine being in either one of their shoes though. Edward for obvious reasons. I mean who would want to be electrocuted? And Bella? Well I think that she just fell in love with a man scheduled to die and how awful is that? It would literally haunt you for the rest of you life.

So, I ask you...did he do it?

I love your writing.

Keye
FangsForTheMemories chapter 1 . 7/23/2010
awww that was so sad! but i really liked it, you are a good writer x
Write-in-Front chapter 1 . 7/21/2010
Oh my dear lord! I loved it! I damn near cried a few times and the only reason I didn't was because my boyfriend is in the same room and I didn't want to look like a wuss. So! I gotta know... did he do it? I don't think he did, he couldn't have. Poor Bella :(
Satan's Adorable Spawn chapter 1 . 7/15/2010
I never cry, but I felt the tears coming! So sad! Loved it, but did Edward do it or not? I don't think so.
o0S0o chapter 1 . 7/12/2010
i stumbled across this story searching for another story when i decided to read this quickly...but of course you cant read this story quickly because as soon as they interact i felt myself tear up.

this was a wonderfully written one-shot where my heart was heavy at the situation and can only imagine how bella feels

im curious as to whether he did it, i have a conflicting view, on the one hand he didn't do it and that was why he was so resigned at the end because he was giving up, but then on the other hand he mentions that he didn't mean to and was trying to protect himself...

i am insanely curious as to whether you wrote this with the intention that he was either guilty or innocent, and which one? i dont know if you have done this for others that have reviewed but i would LOVE it if you would let me know and a readon perhaps...?

i love reading fanfics like this, not necessarily angsty but ones that are so well-written and touch your heart..thank you!
MayaCullen20 chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
Dear readingmama,

thank you so much for writing Incomplete.

This is a beautiful story, one of my favorite one shots, and I can't tell you how much I love it.

I've been crying for the past ten minutes and can't stop...

Did he or did he not do it?

Although I wanted you to reveal the truth so that we don't have to guess, I am pretty sure he was guilty, but that he had done it for a reason, so I can't stop myself from liking him.

I am sure that he would have touched my heart too if I had been there.

I really wanted to write you the longest review ever, but I can't see a thing because of the damn tears so I have to stop now.

Kisses, Maya

P.S. I have just finished reading Sinful thoughts for the second time, it is definately in my top 5 stories on so I guess you'll be hearing from me soon.

You really know how to make a person feel good with your stories, so keep writing. Well done!
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