Reviews for Oh the Thoughts
EnviousSinEnvy chapter 1 . 3/16/2013
Its not too bad for your first lemon, though I personally consider Kid to be a uke and Soul to be a seme.
jezabella singe chapter 2 . 12/26/2012
Were they outside in the park? O.o
Ruby of Raven chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Ha! this version was good, too! ;)
Dark little kitty chapter 2 . 4/10/2012
I swear i have read this before but with a different name. perhaps they copied you.

Peace out. :)
Deaths kitten chapter 1 . 3/21/2012
He wares boxers with his FATHERS face on them?
Miss Trancy chapter 1 . 11/11/2011
I dids not knoweth of kid's "juicy lips". I don't mean to be harsh but that is quite a large cliche my dear.
Oxxu-kunFord chapter 1 . 4/3/2011
Hm...Uke Soul and Seme Kiddo? I roleplayed that once...I LOVE IT! :D -loves you for making this.- TEE HEE. 3 FAVOURTIES~ O 3O
teaXparty chapter 2 . 2/20/2011
oh mah foamy!O.O it was in tha park...a PUBLIC PARK...i love yooh *happy tears*
YukiTheYaoiFangirl chapter 1 . 6/25/2010
for ur first time its really god. but then again you can see my name :) i would sugest reading secret admierer in this category rated:M in english all lenght soul and kid complete. thanks!
Mitsuki Sieon chapter 2 . 3/31/2010
Shit...Wish I had read this before my review...Ignore that last part then I'm sorry...;;
Mitsuki Sieon chapter 1 . 3/31/2010
This was fairly good. But towards the end I noticed some of you lines were exact to a BlackStarxKid fic I just read and that bothered me a little bit... (i can't remember the author of that one but still) Mind explaining?
Novelist Yaoi Yuri Persona chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
Ok just actually looking at their persona's Kid is more of and uke (reciever) and Soul is more of a seme (giver). It's not bad for your first and you will get better. I suggest watching yaoi animes like

Papa to kiss in the dark

Sensitive pornagraphy

Junjou romantica



and yaoi hentai.

I hope this helps you become more in touch with your yaoi persona. I believe in ya.
Beans-chan chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
...*brainsplode* XD good job.
Roxxorzur Soxxzurz chapter 1 . 12/26/2009
I find it a little strange that the last ten or so lines of this fiction seem as if they're edited from AlphaOmegaPsi's Black*StarXKid fiction "Alone Time", which had been posted a LONG while before this...
Fullmetal207 chapter 1 . 11/29/2009
o.o wow *claps* Nice job for your first time