|Reviews for In the Stars|
| HeartyJessica chapter 8 . 6/2/2010
so great! i can't wait to read more!
| YmkeDG chapter 7 . 5/30/2010
I'm dying to know more!
Please update soon!
| YmkeDG chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
Great story so far!
I love how you write.
Keep going ;D
| swiftwings13 chapter 4 . 3/27/2010
Cute, I like the premise of the story. I hope you continue it
| Sweety1516 chapter 3 . 12/23/2009
Like your story!
Please keep on writing.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/27/2009
When do the romance and angst come in?
And is the woman called CelestE or CelestA?
| White As Snow chapter 1 . 11/26/2009
Your story is going alright so far, but I'm just going to give you a little constructive criticism.
Firstly, you might want to stray away from phrases like "Her deep green eyes were as green as the greenest of trees". You've used the word green three times, and something shorter and more concise would provide a better outlook as to her appearance.
Also, if she has had this illness for five to six months and she is coughing up blood, it is impossible for her to live this long and travel all over the land!
There are a few problems with grammar and you've spelt Gaius as "Gias".
Be careful and make sure Celeste does not turn into a Mary Sue. Many authors parade their characters as OCs, but are blind to the fact that they are blatant Sues.
Otherwise, I wish you luck with your story and hope it progresses well.