Reviews for Blossoming SeeD
Amara the Warrior chapter 1 . 11/29/2009
Not a bad start! There are only a few things you could work on.

1. When someone new talks start a new paragraph. It gets too confusing if you put all the dialgue together.

2. Stay in the same tense. Pick either past or present and stick with it.

3. Don't move so fast with the plot. If you bring up major plotlines too early in the story it doesn't make it interesting to read.

Besides that it's a great start and keep writing!


Sophia ;)