|Reviews for Laid Bare|
| Guest chapter 30 . 3/29/2020
I jumped a lot of lemmons because yes, there are too much, sometimes I got bored but I dont like stop reading a story, so I finished but more for discipline than for liking.
I think that some People can enjoy this reading.
Thanks for your time
| Guest chapter 30 . 6/8/2019
I don't really understand what they are going to do about Charlie. Like wont be put missing persons report and than the Cullen's will be looked fir or is she just hoping to send email and photos to him to stay in touch. I'd have liked to see her hunt the first time too
| Cavelenare chapter 10 . 6/1/2019
I wonder how long this story would be if we actually took out all the sex scenes. Maybe 2 chapters long lol. It exhausts me, this porn-with-barely-any-plot lmao! It’s like- yes, yes, yes, yes we know you belong together... 10 chapters of nothing but ‘you complete me, please suck me dry and pound me into a tree’ is just so repetitive...
| Guest chapter 9 . 11/28/2018
It’s UZI, not oozie.
| Lord-of Oceans-Poseidon chapter 4 . 10/2/2018
how did she wrap her legs around edwards thighs while having sex from behind? i tilt my head in curiosity lol
| Lord-of Oceans-Poseidon chapter 1 . 10/1/2018
the moment bella stepped out of her room and closed the door is the moment charlie should have known something was up lol
lmao did edward dry hump a house gwahahaha
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 30 . 5/18/2018
Yea... I suppose you were right... there really wasn't much more to be discussed. Good place to call it quits.
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 21 . 5/18/2018
Really liked JB response in this chapter. Felt 'REaL'
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 20 . 5/17/2018
Great Jpov addition... It was a nice break from the ExB sexathon. The revelations that Sam had designed for Bella to transform from a good girl with opportunities into a trophy hood rat, was a nice touch. I see that kind of thing happen all the time. Ppl don't know how to turn off 'a good time' and keep looking for it while forgetting to do the work they were supposed to. Then 5yrs pass, and every opportunity they 'could've' had gone to the person who kept their focus on the Goal.
I am glad JB was secretly looking out for her... While of course, still trying to Bed her like everyone else. lolol
Dannnmmmm... SMh. She just had to go and open her big mouth.
"Tell me where it hurts?" -Edward. Ahhh how about the area where the bone is sticking out? Like DUH? I thought they were supposed to be sharper minded? Guess the hell not.
I never knew shame to block out the pain of a bone sticking out of you... Bella laying there, not feeling the bone sticking out of her skin, and just feeling shame, didn't read as plausible to me.
Sorry... that may need to be revisited.
This not looking at Edward after 19 chapters of Affirmation that they will be there for one another, was unneccesary drama added upon an already high point of drama. Sorry that could've come next chapter or waited a few chapters. It was badly timed to my mind.
Good chapter... It moved the needle.
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 18 . 5/17/2018
More sex... more relationship status affirmations. More "I see the good in myself now." -from Edward & "You showed/gave me my place in this world" from Bella
Honestly a drinking game is in order. Can't count how many times I've read that line since chapter 4.
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 15 . 5/17/2018
Jeeeeessssssuuuuussssssssss CHRIST! 15 chaps of "AFFIRMATIONS"
We get it, you're in love. *SEX* You're the only one for each other. *SEX* There will be no one else. *SEX* You will sacrifice for what you have. *SEX*Etc *SEX* Etc *SEX* Etc... I think we've got it.
Sorry... but I find I have to skim over the smut to TRY and find the PLOT and or DIREcTION of where this is all going. And just when I think I've got dialogue... It is just more 'affirmation' and pillow talk because all they do is have sex all the damn time.
Not that it wasn't good. but Dammnnn I get it already... now is there a story in here or not?
| TrillionSchiffer chapter 14 . 5/17/2018
"You're faster, but he is stronger than you." -Alice to Edward
Ahhhh SO? He faces Emmett all the damn time. What does it matter that James is stronger? "
There should have been more of a fight than there was from Edward... What was there was really weak? Sure he was in a predicament, but that was only because he 'allowed' James to put him there.
There were many things he could've done as James crept his way towards Bella... But his balls were sucked so far back into his body, it was like he was choking on them.
He is right... He failed as a mate. ABSOLUTELY Failed. In EVERY way possible.
1Pt for Emoward
| mamaruti chapter 30 . 5/15/2018
Wow! What an emotionally exhausting but at the same time exhilarating read! The way you created their burning passion and literal need for each other was amazing, and I applaud you for your incredible writing talent!
| Guest chapter 15 . 5/2/2018
If I was Bella I would not want Victoria around knowing she was Edward's first sexual experience
| Guest chapter 8 . 5/2/2018
You should.d have kept them as virgins before they met each other