Reviews for Innocence Lost
NewFanFictionFan chapter 19 . 7/15/2011
Very creative plotting. Good character development.

Spelling is good, grammar mostly good except for a few problems. The most common one is mixing up gender pronouns his/hers, he/she, him/her. In addition there are a few typos such as 'then' for 'than'.

I think I read that you have someone beta-reading for you, if so, she is letting a lot of mistakes slip by. Perhaps you need to find another person who will clear up more of these irritating little errors.

Overall your story is excellent, and I appreciate your hard work. Thank you for providing such an entertaining story.

DeathNoteValentine chapter 38 . 3/28/2011
Wow...I can't even...just wow.

This is probably one of the best Snape stories I have ever read. Everything was well thought out, made sense, and written beautifully. It seemed like it took forever for Tizzy and Severus to get together, but it makes sense.

Thank you for sharing such an amazing story. :)
ShagsTheDustmop chapter 38 . 3/11/2011
I've been reading all your stories this past week, sorry I haven't reviewed before. The fact that I'm pretty much running through them all one at a time should show that I like them :)

I would have loved to see the look on the Golden Trio's face when they found out Snape had a wife & daughter all those years!
emcee31 chapter 38 . 12/7/2010
Happy endings are my favourites. :)

Now, where is that sequel you promised?
emcee31 chapter 35 . 12/7/2010
That's 10 galleons you owe me. I know, you don't have them. Puity about that.
emcee31 chapter 34 . 12/7/2010
Well! You couln't have said that chapter was too slow and boring.

Is it the Longbottoms? Bet you 10 galleons (which I haven't got) :)
emcee31 chapter 31 . 12/7/2010
Boring? With your wonderful helpful BB and a loving caring EP, Sev wanting a dementor's kiss and what's-her-name still loving him?

Even on a roller-coaster, or rather especially, you get ups and downs. Keep up the marvellous work.

So, life hasn't been kind to you lately, that's a good reason to escape into a castle in the sky from time to time.
emcee31 chapter 29 . 12/7/2010
It looks good to me. There was nothing that made me feel "this is different".
emcee31 chapter 28 . 12/7/2010
Toothache! That's why you were able to give such a vivid picture of the effect of the cruciatus.

It used to drive everything else out of my head. How you can complete such marvellous chapters with toothache must be magic.
emcee31 chapter 27 . 12/7/2010
I have never had a problem with the canon, which I presume includes all the things JKR has said that have been reported, or that she has written in her website.

Alastor usure of himself? I suppose in the context it fits the canon; not that you have to restrict yourself to it. That would probably be counterproductive.
emcee31 chapter 26 . 12/6/2010
Albus has gone far too long without someone he can really share his depest feelings with.

You've done nothing to apologise for.
emcee31 chapter 25 . 12/6/2010
How can you expect us to review when we're desperate to see what suprised her :)
emcee31 chapter 24 . 12/6/2010
Can't he see he was just protecting himself from an auror who was using dark magic? He was hit with a brick because he had thrown it at Severus. What a scrpulous conscience!
emcee31 chapter 23 . 12/6/2010
I'm glad zat bloke hasn't (yet) turned out to be a secret DE.
emcee31 chapter 22 . 12/6/2010
This isn't the BB we all know and fear.

Severus is really tragic.
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