Reviews for Walking the Path
s-david-m chapter 28 . 8/11/2015
You have a fun story, but your sentences tend to run on. For instance, look at Ayrica's dialogue with Harry and Luna in this chapter. What's one sentence should probably be three.

Then you also have Dumbledore show up in the garden walking with Harry? Pretty sure that's just a glaring typo of some sort.

Then in the Black Gate scene, you suddenly have Luna wielding a staff, but where did that come from? She's always used a wand up to this point, and Harry was using his staff to charge the wards.

Also, this apparating back and forth in some chapters doesn't make sense. Travelling in groups is done via portkey. Luna made one at the beginning, so clearly they can do it, and there's no need to apparate to the black gate 10 times to ferry people.

Other than those minor quibbles, seems like a fun story. Interesting perspective on what happens when falling through the veil, but that doesn't explain how Harry and Luna retained their memories.
s-david-m chapter 20 . 8/10/2015
Fun story so far, but I don't quite get their decisions sometimes. They've proven they can apparate, and they've been to Rohan before, but now they're taking two days out if their jourbey to ride there. Why? They could just apparate there before they all head out to Rivendell.
patty.clark.792 chapter 28 . 8/1/2015
Very very good story. You're an excellent writer. I never liked Harry ending up with the nice but bland Weasley girl. Luna is perfect. Thank you
Rakaan chapter 9 . 6/18/2015
I'm enjoying the story, butI hope he's not gonna be on the verge of passing out every time he tries to use his magic.
Rakaan chapter 8 . 6/18/2015
That first two sentences of that last scene made me laugh a bit. He felt a pair of arms encircle his waist...THEN felt a familiar presence. lol
jrock919 chapter 28 . 5/21/2015
Why aren't they making portkeys instead of apparating over and over again? One portkey made with a rope should carry a good sized group at once.
sylvelle chapter 4 . 5/20/2015
So sending them through the veil, even if you had to go way out of canon with the characters, allows them to go to LOTR as adults.
Tricia
sylvelle chapter 2 . 5/20/2015
You couldn't let them hear his reason for jumping? Poor Harry
spicerabbit chapter 16 . 12/14/2014
Yet AGAIN Harry was an Idiot and didn't wear his mithriel mail. he was given it in chapter 8 and never wears it.
moonlightkiss1515 chapter 28 . 12/3/2014
Nice! Please update soon! Thanks
howdiddily chapter 2 . 10/31/2014
If your going to send harry to another world you need to give him the contents of all of his vaults so he has the needed spell books to continue learning more gold then he will ever be able to spend as well as various forms of armor weapons and staffs not to mention all three deathly Hallows since he's the master of death in a trunk with an unlimited space expansion charm on it with feather light charms to make it light as a feather and a shrinking charm so he can where it around his neck at all times
Exivus chapter 11 . 10/14/2014
This doesn't make sense. Harry exhudes a fealing of power even to those unfamiliar with magic, yet he's exhausted after 2-3 spells? And how can he be injured if he's wearing mithril armor. It's supposed to be almost impenetrable.
WhiteElfElder chapter 28 . 9/11/2014
I find it funny that you put Dumbledore in place of Gandalf when talking about him, Harry, and Maglor walking into the gardens.
WhiteElfElder chapter 27 . 9/10/2014
For the large group, why not use a portkey to take everyone back...Luna can make one?
WhiteElfElder chapter 23 . 9/10/2014
Was the rugged looking unshaven man Sirius? Of course Harry faints when faced with Luna being pregnant.
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