|Reviews for Parting Gift|
| DolbyDigital chapter 3 . 6/23/2016
I like that things are moving forwards, but I do think you have a tendency to rush over important details. Maybe you just didn’t know that much about pregnancy, but it’s not hard to look up. Also, with scenes like where they’re driving to the hospital (a scene which isn’t overly important, and which – judging by the short sentence you gave to it – you were not particularly excited about writing) it’s fine to just put a line break and jump forward to them actually being in the hospital. It would actually read a lot better.
Also, Sam seems a lot younger here than I think you’re trying to go for. You say John is dead, so he’d have to be in his early twenty’s, but if I had to guess I’d say he seems more like he’s sixteen. And with the line [pregnant Sam was so much different than regular Sam]: first of all, it doesn’t make sense grammatically, as [so much different] is not how that should be phrased. Secondly, pregnancy does not alter someone’s personality.
Also, [I thought we having] should be [we were having], [well figure it out] should probably be [we’ll], and [about Dean sang] should either be [Dean singing] or [how Dean sang].
I like that Bobby’s becoming a bigger part of their lives now, and that they’ve moved in with him.
| DolbyDigital chapter 2 . 6/22/2016
I thought this was an interesting chapter. I liked that Sam finally got the courage to tell Dean, and that Dean had known all along (and, yes, this is the one I remembered). I think [during the fourth months he was gone] should be [four months], and [it was pretty irritated] should be [irritating], and you also repeat that sentence, which I’m assuming is an accident.
Also, your dialogue has a tendency to read a little generically, in that any character could have said it. It also sounds a little out of character for Sam and Dean (and Bobby), as they each have very distinctive ways that they talk. Overall, though, this was a nice chapter. I can’t remember what happens next (I thought it took longer for Sam to tell Dean), so I look forward to reminding myself.
| DolbyDigital chapter 1 . 6/22/2016
I think this is a nice start. There’s a lot of potential with this plot, but I do think you have a tendency to tell rather than explain, and (along with a lot of very similar lines which are repeated throughout this chapter) does make it a little hard to engage. Also, [wished he could tell Dean was pregnant] should, I think, be [tell Dean he was].
I know I’ve read this before, so I can’t really say I’m excited to see what happens next, because I think I might remember this one from maybe six years ago, now. Regardless, I think this was an interesting start and I thought that the last line was a great way to end the chapter.
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/18/2015
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| ImAliAndImFabulous0218 chapter 2 . 4/5/2015
My birthday is February 18th! That's so cool! XD great story so far!
| ImAliAndImFabulous0218 chapter 5 . 4/5/2015
If someone who had never known what happened in Supernatural that second-to-last sentence would seem crazy XD lol that's Supernatural for ya!
This was a really great fanfic. It got straight to the point, but didn't leave out important details, and didn't bore us with thousands of explanations. Great punctuation, great grammar, great spelling, and awesome characterization. Overall a really great fanfic! I look forward to reading more of your works :)
| Samfan69Candy59 chapter 5 . 3/17/2015
wow Oh my Goodness Some Great Stories About Winchester Boys Or Winchesters men? Like I Said, Sam And Dean Have Sex Before That Night They're Hunting Demons But Sam Didn't Told Dean That He Was Going Have a Baby? Well Three Them They Waited For Sam Telling His Older Brother Dean He's Going Have A Baby? And Don't Believe Going to Be a father so what now two sons and Younger Daughter Emily Vicoria Winchester, Two Cute and Handsome Chris, Matt? I know I Wish I Was There With Them To Help Out! So All Five Winchesters Had To Rest? bye XD and XXS xxxxc Goodnight?
| TheDorkWith2ManyFandoms chapter 5 . 3/19/2014
I was talking to my friend about this. Like what if Sam was so upset was because he was pregnant and then I find this story. Thank you for being down right awesome.
| jissy chapter 5 . 1/31/2014
| AllyGreen11 chapter 2 . 10/17/2013
My birthday is February 18th!
| Dementors hate chocolate chapter 5 . 6/7/2013
nice story! I'm glad everything worked out when sam delivered chris in the impala.
| iamnotfabulous chapter 5 . 7/13/2012
i read this with a giant smile on my face! it was a beautifully written fic and it was just amazing! definetely favourited :)
| Ash Strachey chapter 5 . 6/21/2012
I have read this story more then once and I still love it! Its a great story!
| Em chapter 5 . 12/1/2010
Really nice story! I gotta say I was surprised when I read that the girl's name was Emily Victoria, since my own name is Emely Viktoria, haha! I mean, what are the odds that that ever happens? Such a sweet story though, and thumbs up for the mpreg. I'm such a sucker for that genre!
| yaoilover6969 chapter 5 . 1/15/2010
awesome loved it can't wait for more stories.