Reviews for The Last Man of Redemption
Lust.Is.Evanescent chapter 1 . 2/15/2011
I actually had to look for this ff again just to review on it, the scene you picked to expand on was as far as i am concerned the cutest BB moment, i LOVE this ff so much bcoz it explains in detail exactly what i was thinking might have happeded if that dream didn't end, and you wrote it soooooooo well...BIG UPS.
meclone2 chapter 1 . 11/22/2010
Planning to continue with the story? The premise sounds interesting.
PhoenixTears89 chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
Sounds like a fascinating premise, although it's hard to tell where you're going from this one chapter. I really hope you continue, though... I'd love to see a continuation, and your writing is quite good.

One small, incredibly trivial thing that bugs me... how do you "drape gregariously"? As I'm used to hearing it, "gregariously" means "talkatively" or "sociably"... how can that describe the action of draping oneself? I mean, you can be gregarious as you drape, but then "gregarious" is not actually modifying "drape"...

I know, it's stupid, but it stuck out at me. )
Alicat76 chapter 1 . 2/27/2010
Just found this and wow, it's amazing! I really hope you continue with it because I really need to know where it's going next... and I mean REALLY need to know!
SopranoZone chapter 1 . 12/6/2009
THIS is spectacular. I LOVE the labworld, so it's fantastic to see another story for it! I'm looking forward to this clearly exciting ride.

On a slightly related tangent, not sure if you're on livejournal, but there is a community dedicated to the labworld, so perhaps if you're over there, you should share! :D
Grand Delusions chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
(First: Evan's Blue is always a good choice. "The Pursuit" is a personal favorite of mine.)

What an amazing story so far! I really like the concept, and I can't wait to see what the other 'coma dreams' are in store. Your writing style is beautiful- just so eloquent.

I can't pinpoint exactly what it is about it that I like so much. It might be how seamlessly you tie dialogue and statements (such as 'he told her...') together so that it doesn't become weighted with dialogue. It might be the emotion that just pours from the words or how you string the words together.

Honestly the only thing that bugged me- which is so minor that I'm a bit hesitant to mention it- I wish you could've used another way to describe the "V" with the zipper. Visually, on the computer screen, both mentions were so close together that the second usage drew attention to itself and pulled me out of the story momentarily. But like I said, given how wonderfully you write, it seems incredibly nitpicky.

Again, this was a fantastic story and I'm realy looking forward to seeing where you take this!
Aching Bones chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
Hi there,

Great start...I know I am going to enjoy this...loved...

'He is no stranger to addiction and knows that when it comes to her, he has no intention of ever learning self-control. He’s helpless… hopeless… and perfectly happy to remain so'...

And how he can not remember ever telling her that he loves her, but how absurd he thinks that is...and how he has being dreaming of calling her 'Bones'...

How he imagines what it would be like for her to open his 'dress shirt if he was wearing it'...

Loved...

'His soul is gone, everything that makes him who he is has disappeared inside the sweltering, boiling storm of her lips as she sucks him into hell and he is deliriously happy to fall anywhere she lets him, thinking that as long as she is the one who drops him, she’ll always know where to find him again inside the inevitability that swirls around them in dark, heady clouds'...

and...

'Everything happens eventually'...

And that feeling of 'panic' that enfolds him...and how he calls her Bones...

Really looking forward to more...

Ger
whatiswrongwitu chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
This is a really interesting story. I can't wait until you bring it into their reality. I really enjoy your writing, it is really good.
rosyle chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
Really interesting idea for a story! Can't wait to see what you have in store for us (and them!) :)
DoctorSweets chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
Amazing beginning. I love how his dream and reality mesh for him.
MickeyBoggs chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
What a fabulous start to a story! So cool to read a Mr. B & Bren extension and I like this whole premise. I'm buckling myself in for the ride!
Pyrate Nyre chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
what a different way to look at this ending. One I am sure would have killed Booth because on some level he would have known Bones was out there waiting for him.

Nyre