Reviews for i hold my breath until you creak to life
TarynCasey chapter 1 . 8/15/2015
There are not enough Sasu/Naru/Saku love triangle stories on this site and I mean triangles where everyone loves everyone. This was heartbreaking and more realistic than most. You did a good job.
concassor chapter 1 . 8/12/2015
This should be published. Wow, the way everything flowed so smoothly and the way you projected each of the characters was so surreal. I absolutely loved it.
10th Squad 3rd Seat chapter 1 . 11/22/2014
Holy freakin mother of all fanfics, that was beautiful.
Mimi the Brave chapter 1 . 11/17/2013
I read this a couple months ago and just bookmarked it, and now that I finally have an account here I just have to review it, finally!

Firstly, the poetry scattering over the whole story was so fitting, torn apart like them, soothing the soul like they did for each other.

Secondly, the house and its personality made everything even more tangible, especially how the combined forces of Sakura and Naruto broke down the defenses, and in the end they all are accepted by that house.

Lastly, the dysfunctional perfection of the three of them - I loved how Sakura came in first, and left first, and then came back, no longer caring about social protocol. They had their own world to them, and you described it in so much detail, it was hard to resurface after reading this again...

Wonderful writing style, and a great vision of how their story might end... I loved every sentence of it!
Mahayana chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
That was beautiful. All of your work is very beautifully written. Thank you for sharing it.
Tainara Black chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
whoa, that was brilliant!
always-kh chapter 1 . 8/10/2012
woah dark and weird and dreamlike but some parts, the end, is still happy and it all manages to fit really well probably because you're admitting it's not perfect but it fits and they can make it work. it captures just how dysfunctional they all are too...
skepsis66 chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
Just wow. What a brilliant and surreal experience. Your words just flow like honey! The transition was wonderfully written, Sasuke so vividly depicted; not quite sane, but I don't think anyone is. Definitely one of the best pieces of writing I've come across in a looooong time!
LuteLyre chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
oh i love it i love it i love it i love it! you have such a way with words. i read this ages ago and just found it again now and oh its amazing.
Halo chapter 1 . 12/2/2011
So beautiful... Your stories wear me out because each character has enough life to suck me in. I love the scenery for each poignant event. Then again, Naruto framed by fire has always been something I love.

To However-long ago your dreams are inspired,

A Fan
Mystic Owl chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
For gothic literature, “I Hold My Breath...” delivered a blissfully if not happy ending. The story left me with a sense of calm and at peace with the character development. I honestly expected more tragedy and misfortune to beget the ‘unlucky’ team seven. I appreciated how you delivered this piece and your writing style is reminiscent of poems such as "Fall of House of Usher" and I enjoyed every twisted moment of it.
korel.c chapter 1 . 9/24/2011
This needs more people to read it.

It's beautiful.
Uchihas apprentice chapter 1 . 10/29/2010
This is life...this is real

yet it is also fascinatingly surreal

I'm indisputably speechless


I can't stop feeling this horrendous ache

and I love every second of reading this story

you might be proud to know that this is the first ever fanfic that I saved in my bookmarks wherein I have already finished reading

and might I add that I'm 15 and want to say that even with my current age, I can truly appreciate and say that you're a great writer and one who can influence others through what they write.

How you wove this peice together, I'll never know

One thing I'm certain of is that you're a genius! -and I agree with every other comment you've received
bobalinabokonon chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
This held my breath. I am slowly getting it back.

(The angst is wretchedly amazing.)
Empatheia chapter 1 . 12/13/2009
Still and always one of my favourites, bb.
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