Reviews for Gifts
Swallow B chapter 4 . 8/12/2010
Wow. That is an answer to my questions about 'Fortune and Men's Eyes'. What an answer. It is so Severus and so Minerva too.

She must have realised 'her continued existence was proof enough'. You are making more sense than JK Rowling here, if I may say so. It is still very painful, but less than her hatred of him.

Wow again. I just have to leave the computer now. I can't read anything after this. I think I'll go and peel some onions.
Chemistress chapter 4 . 1/2/2010
Finally I get to comment on the end of this story, so full of wonderfully phrased observations...

favourite lines:

/It was a spirit unfit to consume except as punishment, and Minerva knew she was going to sit and drink it until it was gone./

/Missed him despite the lingering pain of their fight and the anger she felt over his obvious collusion with Albus in the old man's death./ It is always nice to add a new word to ones vocabulary...I did not know "collusion" yet (just "collaboration")

/But for all that, he had a code that he lived by, a difficult code that had led him, ultimately, to worthy ends, and he had an equally worthy mind, and in any case, she herself was not so free of viciousness and cruelty that she could afford to judge him. She had failed him, as boy and man, in ways that he had not failed her./ Quite so ... I firmly believe that the events of his student days haunted her...

/He would let himself be destroyed, perhaps even welcomed his destruction, and there was nothing she could do./ I think this is exactly what many of JKR's adult readers thought, a long time ago already...

/and darkness settled on the ceiling of the Great Hall./ What a great last sentence with darkness true in both meanings...
Chemistress chapter 3 . 1/1/2010
I have been held up by RL to keep commenting on schedule, but here I go now:

this chapter of Snapes POV is just so terribly sad...especially at the end, but let's start at the top:

/He knew that he was participating in a constant competition that only she understood and whose score she never forgot./ what an original idea of "relationship" of the two of them as student / teacher - and very believable...

/never did Snape believe that their personal contests were actually about Quidditch matches or House Cups/ - I think we can call this "canon" *gg*

Your Minerva is just so *missing the right words*: /Your billowing-robe routine.../ /You're going to play 'Competitive Darkness' with me now../ /Well, think again, lad./ I absolutely love this!

/He didn't want to let her know that it was important to him that she'd never had sex with Albus.

Yet it very much was. Albus Dumbledore had already taken enough from him./ I am very thankfull, you point that out...

Now here comes the part that breaks my heart:

/She was right; he knew she was. He'd even considered saying something similar...and he had never expected their arrangement to last even as long as it had. And yet, when she turned away from him, it felt like a little death./ Aren't we humans just too illogical... why is everything so complicated...

/...and yet underneath the acrimony and accusations, Snape had sensed her regret - and his own. He knew that they fought not only about what they'd been and what they'd had, but also about what they would never be and would never have. And what they both missed./

/It had been a consolation to him, her regret, but that solace was one he could no longer afford./ *sigh* - poor guy: but I am not sure I am with you on that, and neither is Minerva...

/As much of a sanctuary as Hogwarts had once been for him, Snape did not delude himself that he would continue to find protection within its walls./ Beautifully written...
aptasi chapter 4 . 12/28/2009
I wish you'd write a sequel to this. I thought the story was very well written and wanted it to keep going.
Tchitchina chapter 4 . 12/28/2009
oh I love how you ended it! Sad, tragic, but perfect! Bravo, really well done. I enjoyed this story a lot thanks!
the real snape chapter 4 . 12/28/2009
Such a perfect chapter. A pleasure to re-read!

Slughorn's idea of a gift to staff that's of no social use is spot-on.

/except as punishment, and Minerva knew she was going to sit an drink it until it was gone./ How devastatingly bleak.

/Sex was only the consequence of her knowing him, not the cause./Great line, great play on the biblical sense of 'to know someone'.

/And she was worse than he, she thought, for she had justified her own unforgivables, curses and otherwise, in the name of good./ Too harsh on herself. Anyone that relentlessly honest hasn't used 'the good' as a band-aid to every action.

/her permanent submission (or as much of it as she could afford) / I love that afterthought. There would be limits, of course.

/Coward, she thought, and downed the lot./ What a spectacular tie-in!

I'm still completely in love with this story, as you know!
kat chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
WOW. Update!
Rosine chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
I wasn't really happier but it seems real. It could have happened in the book.

(sorry about my grammar I'm so really tired I can't think straight any more)

You forgot to label your story as complete...

and I'm looking forward to next week. (well actually I'm not because it would mean the end of the holidays but I'm looking forward to read your next story)
McGonnemort chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
Oh my, poor Minerva. To know what Severus was going to do and not being able to stop it. The way you depict Minerva is so true to how I see her. Fantastic ending, thank you so much for sharing your story!
Bergere chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
Oh... that was just great. As always. A very good story, very well constructed, very... just great!
moira of the mountain chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
This cuts to the bone with the brutal elegance of a well-wielded sword. Touche'. I am bleeding but I do not regret the wound so skillfully delivered. Moira
Rosine chapter 3 . 12/27/2009
It is angsty... But I'm still looking forward to the sequel!
Tchitchina chapter 3 . 12/21/2009
aww that was remarkable! so well written!

Making Minerva hate him not to regret, so slytherin, so Severus! Finally I cannot hate Severus, he's always trying to do the good thing :p

I wonder if he'll manage to make minerva hate him.

I cannot wait to read the next!
moira of the mountain chapter 3 . 12/20/2009
This is a perspective of the MM/SS relationship I've never quite seen before - the willingness of two very powerful magical folk to allow themselves the release of both dominance and submission... very beautifully described - just enough of the erotic, and deeply revealing of both character's temperaments. You know me well and you know I was prepared to be a little unhappy with this tale, but it's so well done, I'm entranced by it. The revelation of the intent of Severus' alledged "cruelty" is so deeply Slytherin and so correct. I have only one tiny beta comment - the first line of the third to the last paragraph seems to have some words repeated twice.
McGonnemort chapter 3 . 12/20/2009
The scenes you write between Severus and Minerva are amazing. So well written that I can see it so clearly in my mind. Absolutely brilliant! I would describe what I love the most but in all honesty all of it was perfection! Are we ever to hear from Minerva's side or is this all about Severus' thoughts and feelings? Either way just keep it coming because I now look forward to Sunday nights!
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