|Reviews for Nishiki No Mai|
| jinky chapter 1 . 9/15/2013
| Unyielding Wish chapter 1 . 5/25/2012
The least I can say is...It was...well, interesting. You had a lot of grammar mistakes in it, and I mean a LOT. There were a lot of fragments. You might want to take away a few periods, and add commas instead.
...But this looks more like a summary than a story in itself. I like your idea though.