|Reviews for Order Up|
| trecebo chapter 11 . 12/4/2010
Much with the character development and the smackage. Smackage is good, when thou knowest whom to smacketh!
| Devillsjustice chapter 1 . 10/21/2010
I love this story! I hope that you update soon!
| trecebo chapter 10 . 10/14/2010
Well, TM, this made my morning read! I like Annie so much. One of the Best OCs ever. She's not aiming to be better or even super. She does her job, does it well, and takes a beating like every good ninja trained greenshirt should. :D
Plus? Dusty. He's quite the cool character, good to converse with. Friends are good to have.
| CrystalOfEllinon chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
Heh. Well, Beachie said it himself...the bags of assorted foodstuffs make a nice soft pad. I take my full portion of the responsibility for this. I feel no regret.
And you're right. That little scenario is the lead in to more than one bad porno. Though Dusty would be WAY better looking then the men in most of those...
It's true about the ninja. Good advice, Dusty. Good advice.
| zenbon zakura chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
i would think the seeing ear ninja heard that... hmmm
| Lady Jaye1 chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
I enjoyed the chapter. Dusty gave good advice and kept whatever anger he may have had well hidden. I recall that particular moment between Mainframe and the rookie and I think I may have the issue it's in. I'm curious now to go check if I do.
Very well done chapter. I suppose the question of how Cover Girl's ka-bar got into the freezer will forever remain a mystery.
| Karama9 chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
Annie really needs to have her butt saved by the ninja... and then still curse the out because she's not about to forget everything that's wrong about them just because they did their job.
I don't envy the cooks having to figure out some kind of meals only to have everyone complain about those meals.
Some serious kind-of flirting going on in here... does Dusty like pancakes? :D
| willwrite4fics chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
You just have to love Dusty. It's a rule. In fact, it's a universal law. I think one day I'll write a story about someone not liking Dusty. Thanks for this. I needed something good to read this evening.
| TinySprite chapter 10 . 10/11/2010
Oooh! Great chapter! Though I am curious if there's ever gonna be something a little more serious between Annie and Dusty. Also wondering what Cover Girl's reaction is gonna be when she gets her knife back...
| Lady Jaye1 chapter 9 . 10/8/2010
Loved it, especially the KP scene and the ending about Kamakura. Great chapter, as usual.
| trecebo chapter 9 . 10/7/2010
Aw, I almost wish she'd've simply out thought them. I know they're ninjas, and awesome, but hey? Not perfect. Sometimes the biggest brains/skills/genius get bested by common sense (or an uncommon sensi!)
| CrystalOfEllinon chapter 9 . 10/7/2010
Oh, my god.
This was...perfect. The invocation to the Great God Beach Head, the carefully-sculpted passive-aggressive plot, the fact that ninja know how to destroy your mind with frighting efficiency. Also, I was forced while reading this to put "Eye of the Tiger" on. It was awesome.
The deliberate appearances right behind poor Annie...Storm Shadow's increasing sadistic glee as he slowly unravels what little sanity Annie was still clinging to...oh, god. I cracked up.
The references to the Incidents were fantastic. The mention of what can happen when you order someone who considers a sword dull unless it can slice completely through at least two human torsos was brilliant. The glimpse into why ninja are easily bored was great. The fact that when Storm Shadow is grinning, it's purely because he KNOWS he's the alpha dog, and he just wants to make sure you know it too.
Loved Dusty. Of course, whenever I see Dusty it makes me happy. I've got a soft spot for him.
They're geniuses. Bored, inventive, anarchic, sadistic, pointy geniuses. And that's why I love them so much.
Glad to see this story updated. Thanks:)
| PhantomEmpress chapter 9 . 10/7/2010
hahahha no prank is as terrifying than the prank in your imagination. AHhahahahahhaaa
| zenbon zakura chapter 9 . 10/7/2010
but there was no fork in the microwave!
| Linuxgirl chapter 9 . 10/6/2010
Rule #1, Short Stack: don't mess with the ninja! They are always more vicious and sneaky than any opponent might ever be.
Great chapter, Stormy's really an absolute badass, when he's pissed off. Hawk really should know better.
Also love the way you give background to Annie and the kitchen staff. You developed some really good characters there. Keep them around.
Hoping for an update soon.