|Reviews for One Last Time|
| Valisilwen chapter 1 . 3/9/2011
A great story. It has great imagery and I could see that really happening before the battle with Bodhi. One thing to point out though is at the end where it says
"We should get ready before barges in and drags us out of bed"
There should probably be a someone or something along those lines after before as well as a period at the end. Not trying to nit pick as the saying goes just pointing it out.
| Ipsissimus chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Oh, if it's Xan, mushiness is acceptable. Especially right before the...um..."Chapter 6 Surprise."
You did a wonderful job with the dynamics between Xan and Alianna, I think. Just one thing: a small typo, with "we should get ready before barges in"-the name is missing. Apart from that, great story!