Reviews for Harry Potter and the Root of all Evil |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Chapter 1 nice start and picking up the name of one of Drizzt enemies... :) Chapter 2 ahh now he owns some land and soon will work at the school :) Chapter 3 nice first 'date' with Rowena. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Brilliant idea to have Merlin as Olivander! That explains so much LOL One thing struck me as unlikely though (apart from no one questioning the future date on the galleons that is), it was this; as galleons are worth so much, how did a store holder have change for one? Surely he would have said that he did not have change for so much money? Good thing Harry did not ask for tea though as it was not introduced into Britain until a little before 1660 - unless of course the wizarding world had it centuries before the muggles did. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good start which makes me keen to read on. BTW won't there be a problem in that the galleons have the date on them? Unless he melts them down into gold of course, but the success of that rather depends on how much, if any, real gold they contain. |
![]() ![]() ![]() First things first, I've noted that you constantly wrote 'immedietly' instead of immediately. I thought that someone might have mentioned that in one of the 597 reviews but apparently not. It's strange though that your spelling checker didn't spot it. It's a mistake that's wrong in any english. (uk, us etc) I think. You made the mistake in this chapter too so I'm pretty sure that nobody pointed it out otherwise it would've been corrected. I've noticed that you made a few references to dragon age. Very nice indeed. So are there going to be more references to dragon age from this point on or not? I got the feeling this chapter was rushed though. There are a handful of mistakes that a spelling check HAS to pick up. I can't belief that you don't use one. Not using a spelling check is just... Well, there would be a LOT more mistakes I think. well, it seems that the promised chapter sixteen is a long way from coming. Since it's been since February last year more then a year has passed already. I'm hoping that my review might jumpstart you into action :p |
![]() ![]() ![]() Most of the story so far is well written. Except for the fact that I spotted a handful of spelling mistakes that a spelling checker should have spotted. Aren't you using one or are they just typo's that slipped in, I'm referring to the word 'immediately.' You wrote it once correctly but you misspelled it twice after wards. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent chapter. 10,000/10 I don't want to sound annoying, but it might come off as it, but, is this fic abandoned? I think I'm going to read through it again anyway to refresh my knowledge of the fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This I's great can't wait to read more |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is great hurry and update |
![]() ![]() ![]() now a great thing about harry going back in time is money. harry may only have a few gallions on him say 30 or so but back then 30 gallions would have been like him having 30 million gallions now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ugh, 15 awesome chapters of goodiness and medievalness! gotta love that so much. Hop eyou update soon, almost a year man! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is AWESOME! and apperently not even the best you can do with this plot. i do hope that you'll finish it, and the rewrite, soon. and i hope a sequel will appear quickly after that as well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well now a few "rite of initiation dream-thingies" have come true and I wanted to look back over them to see what was left so we still have medevil battle with Kite and Tower sheilds, likely the crusades or some kind of civil war. Then there is Nicky Flamel and Dumbly-dor, followed by the DoM fiasco and finally future!Harry's wedding to Fleur (or maybe Daphne, I went with Fleur bc you said "platinum" blonde, you usually descride Daphne as "honey-coloured" blonde, though it could be Tracey.. anyway you know what I mean. Now this was a very good story and I enjoyed reading it, there were a lot of Dragonage references, especially in recent chapters, though similarities started with the Dwarves. One thing I would suggest for the new one, just because it seemed so insignificant in this one, is have Harry work at Hogwart's for more than a year and maybe involve the goblins more. I know you wanted to show his training, but he showed up, met the founders, dissappeared for seven years, comes back, leaves, disappears for 15 years, comes back and he and Rowena start doing things to save people. I just think that while I enjoyed the detail, especially with Rowna's research it got a bit tedious with all the training and nothing with him just hanging out with his new gf. What if they kiss before he leaves and they are growing closer then BAM, disappears but sends the first owl post explaining that he accidentally became a druid. I'm not saying what you did was bad, o, I actually really liked it. Although, I will admit that I may have skipped over a lot of Chapter 12 bc it was late and I wanted to see him reunite with Rowena before turning in, so I missed the explanation of the initiation and realized I missed something when I saw him sailing to antarctica and then finding the fountain of youth in central america. I'm sorry and I might go back and read it, but I've said that about other stories and I almost never do. I am sure the re-write will be even better than the first and eagerly look forward to any up-coming chapters. See you then! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The first vision arrives! Although I'm not sure this is still just an 'almost' cross-over, what with Morrigan and her explanation of her daughter, and the whole "abomination" thing. One more then I'll be donee this version and will leave an unintentionally(sp?) long review. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, Dragonage is the obvious "almost cross-over" monster's ball is the movie and your reference is "make me feel good" (thank god for IMDb, huh?) but I don't know about the game. My first, and only, though was duke nukem though I don't think that's right. So what is it? Pretty please? I really want to know! Thank you for allowing me my moment of immaturity. |
![]() ![]() ![]() *sigh* I was quite excited when you added Morrigan to the story, even though it was a short time. And I wish she was romance option for both genders, I had to make a male Warden. update soon |