Great story, great ideas! One thing that I'm confused about... the names keep changing, such as Doveleaf to Dovestorm in a different chapter. Lots of names change. Also, a few grammar mistakes that could be worked on. Other than that, keep it up! Great story!

THIS STORY ROCKS!

yay new chapter... you made Ivyfang huntress sooner than I expected

A few mistakes you have here:

“No, Ivyfang, I would go anywhere with me.

and

“I didn’t ask you if you missed Dovewing, I know you miss you. I asked if you missed the Clans.”

Sorry Im a critic. :3 But thats who I am, great story so far!

yay for this chapter

I was just re-reading the story,(it is awesome!) when I came across something. In the alleagences, the huntress is named Bengalfang. Yet in the story, she is addressed as Bengalclaw. What happened?

This is AMAZING! I LOVE the new aspect of the Fireclaw Nation! A good suggestion for you, though, would be...since the Nation lives off the opposite side of the warriorcode,(hunting for yourself, killing ruthlessly, ect.)the nation should disobey the ENTIRE warrior code, then Ivyfang could be surprised...And the rest is up to you! Your stories are AMAZING, and don't stop writing!

"shivers"

um... wheres Ivy(insert last half of name here that I think is stone)