|Reviews for The Birthday Present|
| The Humble Mosquito chapter 1 . 2/4/2006
As you say, your 2002 self wrote some top quality slush.
Problems: The plot, the rushed characterisation of everyone with Harry, and the fact that Harry sounded like a suicidal teenager rather than the *brave* hero of the magical. Get it right! - Harry is schizophrenic, remember!
Good things: The use of the word 'Portuguese,' which to my eyes, looks entirely correct *glares at previous reviewer.* And the fact that if you'd written it a little better, it *might* have been quite emotional.
So yeah, love your work; just not this.
Andrew. (Who is 1/172 Portuguese...)
| The Black Tower chapter 1 . 2/3/2006
Portuguese is a language not a country.
| Samara-chan chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
I love it! So deliciously dark... lol. Keep it up!
| Tar Irene chapter 1 . 8/16/2003
You ARE brilliant. You must be one of the best angsty writers I've ever read. I loved this. The mingling of the present with the past, the flashback in the midst of the conversation, heck the whole premise of his story. Very, very well done, I think it's something just like Voldemort would do and that Ministry official was very Ministry-ish lol. Again, great job.
| Aggelos chapter 1 . 8/10/2003
Coolies! It's a nice change from the incredibly annoying fluff other people post.
| Gyakutenno Megami1 chapter 1 . 6/27/2003
Yeesh... And now, off to fight the overloaded site! Are loads of Sirius fanfics jamming it up or something?
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/6/2003
a nice change from the fluffy happy crap, i believe.
| MillionMoments chapter 1 . 4/25/2003
This wasn't what I expected at all. I was already for the angst but whoa! You go girl! Make Harry feel the guilt...*evil laugh*
Make us all cry.
| Butler chapter 1 . 2/13/2003
Good story. You put so much guilt in it to make him feel as though he killed them him self.
| Scary Vampiress chapter 1 . 1/20/2003
PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL/NEXT CHAPPIE SOOOOOOOON!
etc etc etc... (Just imagine 'PLEASE' x infiniy)
| just call me Cappy chapter 1 . 1/7/2003
I was expecting the Dursleys to be in this fic, but they weren't, whattheheck, this was VASTLY original. :) The way each chapter swerves from normal, whimsical conversation to vivid, dramatic imagery is astounding. The first I've seen, ever. Creative work, and, as always, wonderful way with words. Keep it up.
| jess chapter 1 . 11/27/2002
realy cool a bit unlike harry but realy realy good
| anon14 chapter 1 . 11/3/2002
not bad. cool angst-y-ness. like it in a deaded sort of way
| jona chapter 1 . 10/30/2002
Very plausible plot-line. A brilliant and original idea and masterfully written! I just wish it was maybe a bit longer. I love reading, and whislt some of the best writing around comes in short doses, I can't help but feel craving for more. Thankyou for writing and sharing. jona xxx
| Lily of the Valley1 chapter 1 . 7/19/2002
I like this plot. A lot! Hey... it rhymes... You were right, it's not fluff. Harry is completely in character, and this is very well written. I like the way you tell us what happened on his birthday through his memories.
I totally understand when you say you won't post until you get more reiews. I did that with Shattered Reality, and someone had the nerve to tell me that I shouldn't do that because it makes people decide NOT to review! They said I was bribing my readers and to stop demanding reviews! Well, I looked that person up, and they don't write anything! They just have an account, and they don't use it, except to rreview other people's stuff! I was like "Whatever!" They don't know what it's like to work hard on something, then recieve almost no signs of appreciation!
I'll stop ranting... Shattered Reality is actually doing very well now, but I was paranoid in the beginning because my first fic was a complete flop. You deserve reviews!
that has always bothered me, too. People will review a story, even if it is crap, if it's the pairing they like, or it's got some slash (YUCK!), or it's just a paody. I've read stories that sound like JKR herself could've written them but there are really bad Harry/ Draco ones that get more reviews! *shakes head in despair* What is this site coming to?
~*~Lily of the Valley~*~