Reviews for Midnight Desire
FeyFaerie chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
Unnecessary, you don't need much improvement in the smut department, it's great, it's hot, there isn't too much or too little dialogue, and you detailed it nicely, without it bring overkill or crude, nice work!
chymom chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
Loved it! Do you have more like this?
FozuzGaoa chapter 1 . 10/17/2011
Wow, that was super hot :) !
vlalita chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
Nothing to improve, it was great.
kaka96 chapter 1 . 5/9/2010
I like the plot. Nice job I always was interested by the idea of forbidden lust best family memebers you play it out so well.
wallace miller chapter 1 . 3/22/2010
needs more oral action. alex should of asked him to eat her out
Owl Emporium chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
Aw, that was sweet. (:
WOWPfan14 chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
it was a very good stiry however i think that it couldn't hurt to make it longer and maybe add some more twists into the story
differentaccount chapter 1 . 1/11/2010

that was smexy;

Yes, that was very smexy XD


CC the Bug chapter 1 . 1/11/2010
I skipped the whole last part, except the last sentence cause I'm only twelve, but it was still good!
CyWiz chapter 1 . 1/7/2010
I could see why you said this story was your best one-shot of jalex now, xD

Like basically what every reviewer just said, yeah I wouldn't think you were new to lemon from reading this. Unlike some of the other jalex stories where they go like wild animals, you actually showed that even though Justin really wanted to have sex with his sister, he has the voice in the back of his head or conscience telling him it is forbidden, not allow and wrong because she is his little sister and a virgin.

The writing is just fantastic! From beginning to end, I was captivated by everything, at one point I was only paying attention to how you describe everything. Great job and looking forward to reading more jalex from you!
DDVZ chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
OMFG...I know I probably built it all up in my head but that was epic. I don't think you could improve on it. Oh god...
Lambertxxx chapter 1 . 12/14/2009
Love the story, very hot indeed
Emeycia chapter 1 . 12/14/2009
Now see, I don't ship Jalex on a daily basis (or any basis at all, actually) but this oneshot is exceptional. It's - I don't even know how to express my thoughts on your fic. First it's suspenseful, exciting, touching, lustful - you've achieved this to a great level and I wouldn't have thought for a second that you were new to lemon - then it comes back to reality and the angst kicks in. They're brother and sister. Ouch.

I love your description. I love Justin's hesitation and struggle and I love Alex's attitude. You make a reader feel what Justin feels. That's great writing there. In fact, I could see that from the first sentence of this fic, right down to the last.

Very, very nice.
Baku babe chapter 1 . 12/12/2009
Considering you don't have much experience with lemons, this was awesome! You totally rocked my socks off heheh great one-shot!
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