|Reviews for House of Uzumaki|
| Ninjazzz chapter 1 . 6/25
Through most of this story we see more bleach elements. What about the other Naruto elements? What happens to Konoha after Naruto dies. What happens to Kakashi. To the rest of the Konoha 12? Does Naruto see Kakashi in the afterlife? What about Iruka? Or old man Teiuchi?
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/16/2017
I was at first wondering weather ppl from naruto would pop up, then I remember the killing ppl and hell part, and if cannon they'd probably killed and went to hell
| yokishko chapter 1 . 10/17/2016
OMG I completely loved this story! Sure I would have loved more Naruto-funnies but that's just because I loved this so much XD
Though I do have to admit I had an issue with the "hatori" thing (and it's "Haori" btw) because I kept picturing Sōma Hatori from Fruits Basket in relation to every mention of hatori (I just kept laughing).
| jj chapter 1 . 4/24/2016
that was one of the most amasing fics ive ever read excellent job
| ThomasNealy chapter 1 . 9/26/2015
not a bad story.
I do think you meant Yin and Yang not Ying and Yang other then a few other spelling issues I did not see many problems.
| csad21 chapter 1 . 9/20/2015
This is a great story, and I loved reading it. Oh, Naruto! Couldn't become Hokage, instead you'll become the Head of Central 46. :D
It was good that it was not a multi-chapter, not least because this story, from the things you've hinted at and outlined in this one-shot, has the potential to be a multi-chapter with 100-300k words, and those more often than not get abandoned simply because they're too intense for the author to maintain interest through it all. So no complaints from me about length. Especially if it saves us things like love triangle and Kyuubi backstabbing Naruto, both of which would have ruined the story for me.
However, I wish you had not left a few threads simply lying loose without elaborating. For example, the whole Minato being trapped in "the shinigami's stomach" thing that the Narutoverse has is rather incompatible with Bleach. And Kushina gets mentioned only once at the beginning and never again. When you consider Naruto would definitely have had asked about his parents... Yeah. (But then, did we even know about Kushina and Minato in 2009, when this fic was written? Guess that's part of the reason?)
Also: Naruto's Narutoverse friends never get mentioned ever again. This implies he forgot all about them, which is not at all a Naruto-like thing to do. I understand that this is partly because it would make the story longer and partly because you probably simply wanted a Bleach story where Bleach canon was influenced/changed through Naruto. Still, at least a throwaway comment on them later on at some point would have been nice.
Lastly: Wish you'd done a bit of proofreading at some point. Because it is unfathomable where you got some things, such as "chemise cat" instead of "Cheshire cat" or "Hebiojoumaru" when it should have been "Zabimaru". Huh?
Nevertheless, what I said at the beginning stands. This is an enjoyable story that has aged well enough. :) The characterizations were especially well done, Naruto's above all. :)
| Q chapter 1 . 5/14/2015
This story was amazing...i loved it
| Noradin chapter 1 . 3/13/2015
Very good story! Just the right length and complete.
Bringing more conflicts into the plot by making Kyuubi rebel would have been unneccessary aside from prolonging the conclusion of the story - which is not always a good thing.
One or two more fights and a sceene in between just before the last would have been nice however. If you give out new powers to the protagonist you should show them.
Concerning the conclusion... I think it would have been even better for the world to have Naruto head of Central 46 and Byakuya Captain-Commander. In your story it was always Naruto who established the morals and Byakuya who acted proper. Thus it should be Naruto superwising the making of the laws and rulings and Byakuya enforcing them with dignity.
Neither of them would neglect their training, one way or the other, so combat power should not decide this - aside from learning from past mistakes and having Central 46 capable of defense and more visible - which would be another reason to appoint Naruto.
You have a few gramma issues misplaced words in your story - mostly interchanged homonphones (like 'here' and 'hear', etc.).
Again: Great work and a pleasure to read!
| Ryoko Ishida chapter 1 . 2/3/2015
...Holy crap... I read through the entire story (awesome btw), and I just NOW realized it was one page. XD
| Ferm chapter 1 . 1/26/2015
whoa. I finally read it. It was amazingly written, and you nailed naruto's character. I loved the setting and was in awe of how smoothly you were able to take us from one event to the next. This wss a tighly packed bundle of joy for me :)
| pie480 chapter 1 . 1/18/2015
I wish that, you has spread this out into chapters and gone into more details. For example, I wanted to hear more of his adventures in rukongai, more about the ryoka invasion, more about what happened when he got the other half of Kyuubi's powers, their reactions, how he had to retrain and then kicked ass again, the Quincy war, more Ichigo, whether anyone from his world come to soul society, what happened to his ninja skills, and what happened when Ichigo died. Other than that, this was a very cool fanfic. It's just that like I said, I wish you had spread it out more and been more detailed.
| BaltaineShadow chapter 1 . 12/12/2014
That sums it up... perfectly :) Nothing I would have wanted in any other way... :)
Thanks for this story!
| Nostalgic Beauty chapter 1 . 12/7/2014
Wow this was epic, absolutely epic. I wish it was longer just so I could bask in the epic-ness. I loved this story. Well, I love all of your stories, but this one is special, since it's complete. Keep writing!
| tanithlipsky chapter 1 . 9/10/2014
| Tsumujikaze Yumi chapter 1 . 3/17/2014
That was really gréât xD !