Reviews for I shall keep my promise
MrsGruff chapter 1 . 7/15
omg i cant read this. none of what you wrote makes sense. im gonna take a guess and say your maYbe 12 years old. take this down and rewrite it. It makes you look unecducated.
dips04patil chapter 35 . 5/16/2016
pls continue updating. ...finally bella came to senses pls write more want to kno wht happens next...:)
Debbie Hicks chapter 36 . 3/27/2016
That JAKE DON;'T GRAB HER NOW They wre drunk then NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! My tearing SCREAM WAs RIPPED BUT SUDDENLY ripped very far overextremely by Dontating as al of te more of the Ratlesnake Venom but with South American Vampire venom to te child witll be a Species then it went too far wrong Blood-[Venom blacked out who turned her tell us that take her now she is into agony of of it Jacob Black don't I don't have anyone you will be guaded thast screaming then ten brught in here but suddenly the Lst of of the Blood was Draind them my wholliest but truest heartbeat was sonded but finally died With them suddenly Dawn Read Spier sign te truest papers of the United Fderation of Planets will Work for both yes she is yours by law of the Federation we agreed to help you that it was already too late myself died of the birth of my Eight kids were very different bitten with teeth suddenly te true but real chige with each both from a single drop of blood was onto my tree barretes harden into a Shattering crown tey rejoiced of a majestic princess with lords and ladies myself was a mother to my ybrid children was into training held the rank of Wing Commander by law that it was my Carnivorous self but te Seer found me bleeding to death with them suddenly CARLISLE She is cold now that with them wit teir mates tat it really happened a breaking of all ribs and wo pelvises spinal cords suddenly lost our own earts and dead on Arrival with te best friends suddenlt snapped oh god it's breaking! tHAT BLACKED OUT With them but shattering from here into flam,es thrown with pets with young with child but suddenly crunching freely from te as all of the gods and goddesses blasted by destroying by firetat was it burst freely shattering tenit really screaming blasted freely that was it freed of the bodies taken from here you are punished eleven must stay as Americans then it really happened eappeared with the bodies Msters we have a problem she is Changeed illegally by Creatres both of them had Eight mutant children half-Werewolf and Half-Vampire slayer and hunter children are Daywalkers turned the other children are hybrids bitten teir way out with the other children bitten too soon have aged to look like children what their own parents are infertile of the Change my broter destroyed them killed as all of tem but are resurrected but reincarnated as Kindred and Galactic Lycans we bring each both accused of this rime are sentenced to die here that destroyed the corpses ten it realy happened my host suddenly revived me from death shattering with their hosts I was Crystalized borg white so icy cold to the touch Alice she revived herselfwhat is she she is a Vampire slayer it is a special Vampire assassin reprogramed to slay Vampires With him Alie she is hurt from the attack her children grew up imprinted with oter children but had kids I am afraid you never have children but the powers is a mental shield you do have it tat wit temblasted with them suddenly blacked out by braking outside then was no more that I was Immortal so they oh god I am so thirsty whoa Nellie keep it down what happened to me you wre dying te host bit you graced u with Ancient beauty Immortality enhanced superhuman strength and superspeed and longevity and enhanced hearing and enhanced eyesights a heighten sense of smell and a terrifying thirst it's blood Great Moons of Krypton my eyes they are Red yes lost a lot of blood from tour system what is that I was hungry so they my first hunt was a success but over drained as all of animals but it came too late with as all of from Around the world killing animals was deathly thirsty so thirsty huntig like craziest but then it really happened blacked out but shattered from the mouhs ten it really happened myself was resurrected but undead like a corpse no thank you I was with proper manners of a More civilized lady in due time reached America te young burst free but I was full but fed had gained Gold/black eyes my hair was thicker fier striking far more beautiful and was vain of my looks from the goddesses of beauty known as Venus was the Roman name and not minding my business looked older than my teens Alice what she doing had to look her best before hunting oh no you look different I was cursed by te gods and goddesses gained poise elegance and was graceful by now te bodies we taken but myself was on a strict milltary diet hold on bought this honking hunting device a stoic logical way that blasted h man Bears that Lynxes git back here you beast I suddenly evolved my truest superspeed was fast en I bore down began drainig it to death ten all of the suddenly the Tal-Shaya with a sharpest breaking noise oh my god Alie what is it the Volturi about us she is drinking wel it's healing her from her attack that it came too late I was so stuffed I had to drain less to go on a Vegetarian diet then blasted freely from as all of animals killed from here then burst ouside that to replace my blood supply then it really happened in te dead of night burst outside officially became a race of our own wanderers and nomadic began to feel sick then smashing freely Then took the corpses then it was too late illed but were destroyed te four had children suddenly bitten tem wre tenagers ten adeded then but blasted freely ten suddenly shattering they gained mates as all of tem spread our nwest species shattering freely then blasted freely then crunched from here ten taken were more that te Volturi heard of us were immortal but walked like gods and goddesses but snapped from life to death officially now the four never had kids again ourselves were punished by them but forbidden to see them we were spirits cursed with death but snapped from here but shattered looked young-looking by now Commander the Mother sobbing for her children we are cursed with death what is that oh man we are goners of Commander Strom the three sweated bullets of him very tall and Musculare my best friend was desirous and flirty using r powers yes it his name Captain Solok I spoke fluently Vulcan words and phrases oh my god the host teaching you a galactic lesson oh crap she is what fluent in as all of galactic languages and phrases and words that te newspapers reported of us/them became Timelss but ancient like them but it already too late but blasted freely ten crunching from here that cursed with Bitter Immortality now it's 2016 the day of our demise but tey wre taken from us
Karma chapter 17 . 8/26/2015
I like your story but it is riddled with grammatical errors. One: you should really learn is that every time a new person speaks a new paragraph should be started. And two: some of your sentences make no sense and I have a hard time correcting it in my head to try to figure out what your intention for the sentence was. To avoid this I'd suggest reading it out loud when your proof reading it and see if it sounds right. I read earlier that you needed a beta, I don't know if you have one now but hopefully this will be helpful until you do.
BeautifulCreatures1 chapter 36 . 5/25/2015
Can not wait for the next chapter. This story is so good. I really hope that Jacob and Bella work their relationship out.
corkykellems chapter 36 . 5/10/2015
Finally She smartens up...I sure hope it is not to late...poor Jake
Ebony chapter 32 . 5/2/2015
Bella is so stupid she is really pissing me off, she really doesn't care about her baby
Guest chapter 36 . 5/2/2015
She's a bitch
chinadoll381282001 chapter 34 . 6/24/2014
Please update this story. I can't wait to find out what happens next. I mean lets be honest hopefully Bella realizes that she is wrong. I hope she doesn't over think it to the point that she goes back to being the selfish ignorant little girl( there's so many names I would love to call her) that she really is. She needs to get a reality check because her choices suck! I'm so Team Jacob its not even funny. He deserves better...
alixandria chapter 35 . 5/7/2014
When will u post again?!
alixandria chapter 34 . 5/7/2014
damn jake, chill man...
alixandria chapter 33 . 5/7/2014
I hope she does go to jake?!
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alixandria chapter 30 . 5/6/2014
Oh shit!
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