|Reviews for Without Sasuke|
| Evo-Kun chapter 41 . 9h ago
wow m8! keep it up! :D i cant wait for you to finish this!
| FOXJ NS 4EVER chapter 41 . 3/5
The time has finally come that i have caught up to ch.41, all in just less than a week. At the moment i don't know what or how much i am going to say.
First and before everything. I want to thank you, my friend, for sticking to the story. Your past couple chapters have all mentioned updating late, some months. Either way i understand your reasoning for this, just like all of us your human. You have you own issues in your personal life that affects you severely and my condolences to all the hardship that you have faced whether emotionally or mentally. I am proud to see that despite all those intense struggles that are you are still here and have not abandon your story, even after all these years! :)
I decided to start off with this because whats more important than a review of a story is understanding the pain that the author goes through, so again thanks for persevering. Hopefully, this eases and helps transition all the comments i have to make.
To start things off i really enjoyed how you made the timeskip and i found my answer to how Sakura would be trained in medical ninjutsu, clever adaptation. This way so far she has gained proficient knowledge and sufficient experience with Jiraiya and Naruto before learning from Tsuande. Good job. Plus all the chapters regarding her return, including the Kushina battle, the Anbu trainee battle, and her promotion, was greatly creative and i loved reading. Furthermore, Tsunade dispatching the team to Suna was a interesting team to canon. All the details from that chapter about that was well done.
However, this is where i stoop complimenting you, in all my previous comments i have never actually evaluated your story's progress because it seemed you were enjoying writing it, had time, and the quality was good. But its clear to me that the events in your personal life have severely affected your writing, especially after taking periods of great absence at a time off from the story.
Starting from ch.38 and even now i can tell a difference in the quality and enjoyment of writing from you the author. When you mentioned that you might be rusty, i doubted it because of how your story in general held great heights of quality. Yet, it seems that you are rushing through some if not all of these latest chapters. Your spark seems to haves died since the beginning half of the story. It truly pains me to write this because i acknowledge and respect you as an author of a great story.
Changing topic, I know that you said that your sticking to the story, but I'm still going to say i have strong faith and trust that you will finish the story and not abandon it. Heck, now that I'm a strong fan of this story, I WONT let you abandon this story no matter what :]! BELIEVE IT ;)! You have made not only an incredible story, but an outstanding NARUSAKU story, so their is no reason that would ever stop me from motivating you. Ive been gradually been starting to be recognize as a fan who heavily supports the artist/authors of Naruto fan community; even helping to keep a story or a few alive. This is exactly my goal with your story. I will be here every step of the way to give you the strength to overcome all obstacles to continue your story. If you ever have a trouble or concern whether personal or in writing the story. Let me know and i will do the best that i can with my time to help you succeed. I came back to the Naruto community because of NaruSaku and in general Naruto. To inspire authors like you to continue and not abandon their story is what i live for when Naruto is on my focus and since returning. You may think that your potential has fallen and that your quality will never be as good ever again, but I'm here now to tell you to get back up on the ground and move along with life and never giving up :)! As a first time beta to a different story, I may not be writing it, but i know how difficult it is to continue to revise and edit a story; it is very demanding, but don't forget it is very rewarding. With that being said, Try to go beyond that limit, and i ensure you that you can do it, were human we dream of the impossible, and even if we never get there, we nevertheless reach great heights of personal achievement :]! Most of all if this hasn't given you renewed passion, then this will certainly do it; Never once forget why you started FanFiction in the first place. You started I'm assuming because of a strong love of Naruto, writing Naruto fanficiton made you truly happy, so don't give that away, if you are ever thinking of abandoning it. Life is rough but if you remember those time and how happy you were than you will definitely find the courage to keep on moving towards your goals in writing fan fiction and in life. BELIEVE IT! :]
Overall despite how I'm sadden to read how you've fallen, i will stand by you and your story. Also, i want to apologize if anything i said might have offended you in anyway; i just believe you strongly needed someone to tell you this and voice you back on track .. I know that you will finish your fanfic and that you have the power. I truly encourage you to pm once you read this review, better yet i insist that you pm. I know that you already responded back to my first review, but at that time i bet you didnt think i would love your story as much as i do or be this dedicated:P. Like i said before and i will say until this story is FULLY complete: while under MY watch "WITHOUT SASUKE" will never be left abandoned and you, my friend, will have my complete and undying support whenever you need it _so be sure to ask me anything regarding Naruto or something else; I'm always up for a nice chat. )
Well thats all from me for now. You can guarantee that i will review again once you update chapter 42 because ill be looking forward to it :D. Ja NE
FOXJ NS 4EVER
| FOXJ NS 4EVER chapter 32 . 3/4
Okay so I'm almost caught up to ch. 41 and i really can't wait! :D
What to say, what to say. Overall, I loved how you added interesting twist to canon from the invasion all the way to the return and inauguration of Tsunade as Godaime Hokage! :]
Most times, readers tend to know the direction where the story is going and the specific details/events within the main plot. However, you, my friend, have described everything it so unexpectedly. By god i can't get over how excellent it was. Naruto/Sakura learning more of their nature manipulation, the difference in Kakashi and Gai's battle with Itachi and Kisame, and the idea on how exactly Jiraiya gets his information, never thought of that. Heck, even when Jiraiya and the duo finally reached Tsunade and Shizune their whole interactions was amazing to read. But out of all, the fights that followed all of them were so great and uniquely written, and i so loved how you added Naruto's plan that is definitely your original idea :) Congrats on a good job.
I so hoped Sasuke would have died or at least had his eyes taken out :(, it would be funny beyond on end to imagine how Orochimaru would react :'). Although i do not object to Sakura leaving with Naruto on his trip because the two are inseparable and there's no way to see them not going by this point, Im wondering how you would make up Sakura lack of medical ninjutsu. I guess my problem lies with how Sakura would have been able to have strengthen all her skills alongside with a newly acquired knowledge of medical ninjutsu. I know that for sure or hopefully will have mastered mokuton ninjutsu, but hopefully in the next coming chapters you wrote a way for her to also gain the knowledge of medical ninjutsu despite being away from Tsunade :D.
Overall, congrats on everything you have accomplished so far, your fanfic is definitely maybe the second best I've read in total now, or the best I've read in a long time. I can't believe how much progress I've made in catching up to your story, 200k is the most I've ever read all at once since coming back to fan fiction. Either way, I so can't wait to start reading and find out how their journey went.:) Well until my review on ch.41, which officially marks that i caught up to the current events in your story and announces that you have a captivated reader for your hands ;). I would defy anybody from giving up on your story once they get past the bell test, its too good of a read! :]. Ja Ne
FOXJ NS 4EVER
p.s Dude, you are certainly a master on writing the unexpected, the one thing that caught me 100% off guard (O.o) about this section of your story out of everything was your sudden "Lime" :). I seriously was shocked to see that you actually wrote it ., and for a few minutes was wondering how to approach it haha. I made a pledge to myself since returning to skip or not read lemons or limes, but your story is too perfect not to read it, so congrats on genuinely surprising me to be left speechless! D
| FOXJ NS 4EVER chapter 23 . 3/4
Urgh, so far your story is exactly as good as i expected it to be! Everything is just plainly awesome. I just hate how you let the stupid teme escaped. I would have loved to see how the village would respond to his betrayal, and his own reaction to having been beaten badly by Sakura! Either way the Chunin Exams have possibly been one of the best I've ever read out of all the fanfics out there! :) Cant wait to see what happens between our favorite duo next; hopefully they become Chunin! o. Until i review next time which hopefully will be soon! Ja Ne
FOXJ NS 4EVER
| FOXJ NS 4EVER chapter 1 . 3/3
Okay, first i got to apologize in advance for not commenting sooner, but i was too busy being engaged in your fanfic and too preoccupied with my personal responsibilities this weekend.
Firstly, I love your story so far I'm up to chapter 14(1/3) of your fanfic and absolutely love it, it way better and have great quality. Even if it contains the occasional mistake, i don't care your story is so good. I especially love the fact that you created this story back in 2009, because thats the year before i left FanFiction for 3-4yrs. So i can't believe that i never read your fanfic back then because i literally read all the new NaruSaku fanfic updates whenever they came out. I really don't know how i missed it but I'm glad I'm here for you and your story now. You can guarantee that you'll always have my support and encouragement when it comes to anything related to Naruto and especially NaruSaku o! Im also glad to see how much your story has prospered in the four years since you began it! :)
Honestly, I've been looking for a good pure NaruSaku fanfic since coming back the new filter system annoys the hell out of me and makes it difficult to not have to see SasuSaku or NaruHina stories. Either way in the midst of all those stories i am glad to have found yours. It truly is a diamond among the of all, I really do enjoy the NaruSaku development that you have showed, it is by far one of the best I've ever seen in a long time. Plus, nowadays, its rare to actually find a good story plot that solid NaruSaku its mostly always a stupid harem. SO thanks for hopefully keeping it just NaruSaku for the whole of the story.
Next, you have some originality my friend. To me you have only gotten to the Second part of the Chunin Exams but you are already showing classical ideas and originality that many new authors do not possess. Seriously everything you have written so far from the beginning to where am i at now may be the same old same old but you have perfectly written it on a whole new eccentric level. For that my friend, I applaud you and hope it continues to remain this excellent as i continue. I honestly believe the No Sasuke in Team 7 makes for one in the top five story in NaruSaku and Naruto FanFiction that i have ever read. It makes happy to know that after all these years you have experienced some great success in number of followers, favorites, and reviewers of your story! ] :)
In conclusion, I don't know what to tell you more than what will only encourage and pump you up more if your actually reading this hahaha :P. Just know that ill be posting a response once i get another third into the story and again once i catch up to your latest chapter. Finally after i catch up expect vivid replies by me every time you update. I personally don't know how your currently feeling about the story and how difficult your personal life is right now but just know that if you take one day at a time you'll make. Plus, if Naruto does come to end, I'm from this moment on not letting you ever think of quitting :] :). Ill be motivating you until you finish no matter what! :D.
Well i think i reviewed more than enough so until i post again, which i guarantee will be smaller! Ja Ne! ;) ]
FOXJ NS 4EVER
| NamiNavigator chapter 10 . 3/2
I love how you present Ino. She's actually one of my favourite characters, so seeing her presented in a good light in awesome.
| Isuzumi chapter 41 . 3/1
Good story , waiting for the next chapter !
| soarath chapter 19 . 2/28
but wait they already met jiraya on their first mission how do they not reconise each other?
| Tifah 98 chapter 40 . 2/28
You didn't have to kill jaraiya I was CRYING the whole time snifff#!
| Tifah 98 chapter 11 . 2/27
It was an okay CHAPPY!
| Publicola chapter 6 . 2/26
That was a phenomenal battle sequence between Kakashi and the Grass nin. You really get a sense for why Kakashi is so feared, which is not at all my impression of Kakashi from watching the original series. Great work.
| ConscriptReporting chapter 37 . 2/25
Dark Konoichi Ideas that are about the same age as Naruto hmmm. I would say Fuu from Taki her character as shown isn't well developed in the manga so you could literally write her any way you want. Plus with being a jinchuuriki she has a legitimate reason to hate everyone if need be. Same for Yugito if you want to change her age like many fan fictions do.
| ConscriptReporting chapter 29 . 2/25
Sakura should have killed him while she could have done so. I see your author note next chapter but then again no one ever has to know she killed him other than Naruto, and I am sure the Naruto in this story would have been able to keep it a secret if he thinks Sakura would get in trouble. Though if you had said she couldn't have brought herself to kill him I could have understood. Either way its your story, and so far it had been decent for a Narusak fiction. I like that so far you have not bashed Hinata. Like so many other Narusak fictions feel the need to do. You have my compliments for a believable scenario within the AU of your story for Sakura to actually decide Sasuke is a prick, and Naruto deserves a chance. To me as a Naruhina fan this type of Narusak fictions are few and far between
| thedarkpokemaster chapter 41 . 2/25
wow another very cool chapter and like how its going even more now :D so please keep it up
| trebeh chapter 41 . 2/25
Just a quick thought but why had you needed Asuma to be Hiruzen's nephew instead of his son?