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holy crap. this is like the 5th story i have seen this month that was revived after not being updated for a long time. I am glad to see it back and will start rereading it in a few days.

Well now, did not expect to see this story get updated, good on you. Its been so long I had forgotten the plot.
I read the first few chapters, then got impatient and skipped ahead to this one.
Your writing style has changed, but that isn't necessarily a bad thing. I have seen several writers change their style as time goes by, and always for the better. Your style for this chapter seems to frame the dialogue more, and is a bit more clipped.

Short chapter, a bit dialogue heavy, which might be why you said you were not happy with it, but so what?
Stories are journeys for both the reader and the writer.

Sometimes you just hit a spot that feels awkward and is hard to put out, hell its been so long that maybe you are just rusty.

To me what is the most important is that you want to finish this fic. That matters. A LOT.

This fic is one of of the old ones, from before Naruto finished. Hell, I think it predates shippuden by a fair bit. Stories like yours and other relative "classics" such as Naruto one man team and chuunin exam day are special, because they were from a time when most ideas were new and untested. Hell, your idea here is STILL unique as far as I have seen, as far as "successful" fanfiction goes. (Over 100k words)

What is more is that many of the better known fics, like the two aforementioned, went unfinished. It would mean a lot for this one to finally make it all the way.

Keep on pushing, dear author, and know that there are readers still rooting for you.

Second review. How did Sasuke know the chidori? Kakashi didn’t teach him cause he was on a mission the whole time and he’s the only one who’s technically supposed to know it. He couldn’t have copied it from the bridge cause of both the mist and cause he was knocked out at the time.

I want you to know that there is a mess up in the chapter concerning the second exam. You only had 12 teams make it to the second exam where only 6 teams (18 Shinobi)can make it through to the last. You had 7 teams (21 Shinobi) make it. This to me is a pretty large plot hole. Otherwise I like the way you made the story your own and how you worked most of the fights. I know Sasuke is supposed to be an overbearing character but he’s driving me crazy.

wait where did Hinata go?

Like the client, one wonders if this mission was designed to turn the two into wolves. This type of Kakashi is superior to canon "I ain't teachin' shit til shippuden" Kakashi.

teaching sakura the rasengan Naruto's heritage is a damn shame.

So, a big part of taking the Namikaze name away from Naruto was to protect him from Minato's enemies.

So for his first mission outside of D-ranks, they send the Blond, Blue eyed Genin out with Hatake Kakashi, student of the Yellow Flash, against an IWA kill team?

Did danzo write this mission out?

wow what an asshole move to make by having sakura possibly learn Mokuton to control Naruto since they're a couple.

why did you make Asuma Hiruzens nephew when that's his son?

In response to the cration of the chidori, the Uchiha didn't make it, Kakashi created it when he was unable to apply his lighning nature chakra to the rasengan. And the raikiri is the same jutsu as the chidori (as far as I've seen) just a different name. This stated at least once, if not multiple times, in the anime and is backed up online (not trying to make a big deal about it but I thought you should know).

Nice an update . Well with her chakra control n mental fortitude I guess it could be why the phenomenon happened.

Okay, first things first, welcome back. It's nice to see when a story this old has been updated.

Second, like other's have said, the chapter isn't as bad as you think. While it's short it still advanced the story to a reasonable point. My only complaint about it would be that you formatted it and told the story in single lines instead of in paragraphs. The way it is right now will trick a reader into thinking the chapter is longer than it actually is because of the space single lines take up. It also makes for a difficult read when it comes to passing on the emotions your characters are projecting.

While not as good as most of your previous work in this story it's good enough to carry the thing into the next chapter. I wish you better luck with the next update and it comes to you faster. Thanks for the update and the story is still one of the best ones of this length out there.

decent chapter, just glad for your update, keep up the good work