|Reviews for Trust in God, or, The Riddle of Kyon|
| anon chapter 2 . 2/2
That was very well written, and you got Kyon's line of thinking down fairly well. My only problems are that
A: I don't seen Kyon as being quite so philosophical, (but hey, this is 2 years later, things change,) and
B: I like the Kyon is God theory better (which is an opinion of course, and says nothing of your writing ability).
Great work, would have been nice to have seen a continuation but this resolves things fairly well and leaves the ending up the the reader, which is always nice to see.
| Writingathing chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
Make that existential/catastrophic risk.
| Writingathing chapter 2 . 12/30/2013
Kyon doesn't seem very concerned about systemic risk, does he?
| marduk-report chapter 2 . 12/26/2013
...but i want to emphasise that, despite what i said in the first review, this was really very well done, and i think it was ended in the correct fashion.
| marduk-report chapter 1 . 12/26/2013
It is a well written story, and an interesting concept. For me, however, the logic is unsound (and you had the great misfotune of my reading your story in an introspective mood)
To my mind, Haruhi would specifically have to know that they are "G"od for their disbelief to potentially nullify themselves, which they could not do as "the" sufficient being. God could not knowingly deny its own existence. By contrast, an unknowing god could not, through the denial of the concept "god", end their own existence or that of existence itself, on account of their notion of god being an "other" that they are negating; they are negating an inherited notion that is not necessarily related to their own existence, and as such there would be no problem, because the god being negated is not themselves.
Effectively, Haruhi the unknowing God could negate the notion of "god" through her disbelief in it without repercussions, even if that notion is of an omnipotent and omnipresent god, because that definition of god is still different from the definition of "The God" of Haruhi's universe, and is thus external to and dependent upon her, whereas her own Godhood, by dint of being an attribute of Haruhi, must necessarily exist as long as she does.
| ScarletEdge98 chapter 2 . 12/18/2013
THIS. IS. AMAZING.
very frustrated about the abrupt ending but whatever.
| lesser fairy chapter 2 . 12/1/2013
unbelievable. amazing. truly remarkable. i can't say i expected that. not in the least. this has got to be one of the best 'power reveal' stories out there. i really didn't expect kyon to be such a schemer. the way he roped everyone into it was just...something else. also the open ended ending was just perfect. the way he broke the news to haruhi and haruhi's reactions... all of it. i was half expecting kyon to jump ship after the whole 'you're god' bit. like saying 'you are god to me' or something. but this was just so much better. although, if she DID rewrite the universe just to bring kyon back, would it be just to the start of that day? and would everything that happened be a dream? maybe. maybe not. that sure was one heck of a gambit though. great job!
| MaDeR Levap chapter 2 . 10/15/2013
Now THAT was good. Slight OOCness can be explained by two more years of life. People change, after all. In fact, this is best fanfic dealing with Haruhi getting to know her powers that I ever read.
I especially like that to almost last moment author misleads reader to think it is about love confession, not... this. In fact, Kyon misleads other members in same way.
And as last comment, bad news. I can't see world or this universe without conflict (in broadest meaning of this term). We are defined by it, grow fighting in various ways, compete with nature and other humans, live and die by it - rules of universe pretty much enforce this state of affairs.
In best case, she retcons last two days in way that allows for different scenario (say, actual love confession) and thats it. In meh case, there is one more grave on local cementery (yes, it IS meh case). In bad case, reality is completely, utterly rewritten to have something so different you cannot really call it our universe - but I am not sure if such rules would even permit rise of intelligence or self-awaressnes. Forget about homo sapiens, anyway.
In absolutely worst case, well... you know. End. Of. Everything.
| MondSemmel chapter 2 . 10/4/2013
Wow. That was a remarkably powerful short story, and it did indeed end at a very appropriate place.
Thanks for writing this, Eliezer!
Sadly, this shortcut to fixing our problems is not available to us, but that doesn't make the problems any less important or urgent.
| Ephemeral-Nightboy chapter 2 . 9/26/2013
No matter how many times I read this, it's still just as powerful.
| Cobalt Striker chapter 2 . 9/7/2013
All I can say is excellent, I guess.
| fb39ca4 chapter 2 . 8/15/2013
That was beautiful.
| The defenastrator chapter 2 . 5/18/2013
... Wow. That was amazing. Though I do have to agree with other reviews characters were a tad ooc, I think that they were appropriate for this fic.
| Jubalii chapter 2 . 3/16/2013
I...I just...(curles up in ball)
My brain needs to stop reading. Goodnight.
| Lendary chapter 2 . 3/14/2013
On the negative side, during the discussions on god and science the characters do not talk the way I'd imagine japanese students to talk about the subject, because they wouldn't associate religion with a monotheistic belief system the way the people in your story do. They also seem to be a little out of character, especially Kyon.
I understand that that's kind of the point, but I think you went to far.
That beeing said, it was AWESOME. The "leap of faith" scene is among the most emotionally powerfull things I have ever read, and the scenario of keeping god from becoming religious is HILARIOUS.
This is exactly the kind of thing I hoped for in the cannon, but never got.
When you finally finish Hpmor you've GOT to keep writting fiction. I know your busy with Less Wrong and other stuff, but your story writting is simply to good to loose.
After all, stories like this one give publicity to rationalism, and good entertainment has worth on it's own, so you're even doing something for humanity in the process.