Reviews for Eye Envy
Riz987 chapter 1 . 5/20/2010
kishimoto's love for the sharingan knows no bounds.

Seems like a god mode cheat now.

before it had a blindness after a few uses, then a workaround reveals later.

Uchiha's are like gary stus almost.
lord Martiya chapter 1 . 5/18/2010
Good one. A very good one.
LiMiTeDtheLimitless chapter 1 . 5/17/2010
this is good.

true no one seems to care about the hyuuga eyes, only caring about uchiha eyes. good thing you thought about it!

please continue
Savvy chapter 1 . 5/17/2010
Why didn't Naruto question the fact that the Senju brother was removed from the tell...The Byakugan might not really have much to do with the Sharingan and all the stuff from part one could just be unfounded presumptions ( I.e, seeing as the rennegan seems to have come from Juubi Byakugan could have developed from a past jinchuuriki who appeared after the division) after all they did say Uchiha Sasuke killed Zabuza and haku (misinformation)
TorrentJ chapter 1 . 5/12/2010
This is a really inrresting idea. I've considered before the idea of a Byakugan powerup, although I think the only story I've read that touches on the idea is 'A Growing Affection' by 'Xavon Wrentaile'. I hope you do decide to write more of this story!
Tally Mark chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
Well it's a good thing there's a sequel coming, because I want to know what the Byakugan powerup is! The bit with Hinata's eyes aching seems to be hinting at it...don't leave us in suspense!

Cool idea, that was a fun backstory! :)
Keeper of the Infinite Library chapter 1 . 4/14/2010
I think that this would be a great start to a story... plus you didnt say what the powerup of the Byakugan did and from what you wrote it seems that Hinata got the advanced form... plus I have a very acute sence of curiosity and it is killing me.
Paulthored chapter 1 . 4/12/2010

Whats the Evolved eye's powers?

Good job, by the way.

Ancalador chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
A nice little one off, although I do hope you plan on expanding when you get the time.

I like the idea of the byakugan evolving from sacrifice rather then murder especially since Hinata either has or will do that soon (can't remember at what point she proffesses her love for Naruto). Looking forward to seeing if you continue this, as well as reading the rest of Hokage.
Chance Brown chapter 1 . 4/1/2010
I really liked this story! it actually gave me a really cool idea as to the evolutions of the Byakugan as well!
DarkPoet89 chapter 1 . 3/27/2010
OHH! I know EXACTLY where you're going with this story. If you're not gonna do it I'm more than willing. Come on, plz? continue or let me have it
Fionn the Otaku chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
Wonderful fic! I really like the set up fo this and HInata's reactions to what Naruto asking to be introduced to her famiuly. Another good part is how Hiashi set things up fr his story and the story it's self. I also like how you ended with Naruto compairing Hinata to her to her ancestor and how you hinted that Hinata is developing a new level of Byakugan as well as the truth behind the story Hiashi told.

Also i really hope you continue this story evenualy, parhaps by skipping forward a little to after Hinata begins discovering her evolved Byakugan powers. Or work this Idea into Escape from the Hokages Hat by having Hinata and/or Neiji awaken a second stage Byakugan.
itchaitchacritic chapter 1 . 3/3/2010
this story has a lot of potential but like you said work these storiies one at a time this one might be a big hit with a little love put there( no pun intended or insinuations). you have talant thats all im sayin'.
Anaerobie chapter 1 . 3/1/2010
It was some fluffy tale. Hopefully it's not sugar coated. ;-)

Next, could we have some blood (or action at least): A meeting between Hinata and Sasuke ?

Also if the advanced stage of the sharingan gifts power and the associated madness, what will it be for the advanced stage of the byakugan and will his advanced form impeach Hinata to be together with Naruto?

An excellent beginning with a Hiashi in character. Overall it has all the ingredient for a great tale.

Take your time.

EmberQuill chapter 1 . 2/25/2010
Wow! You know, I never really thought of this, but I should have. It's an interesting concept. I wonder what a leveled-up Byakugan would be like?
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