|Reviews for Eye Envy|
| FluffyNevyn chapter 1 . 1/22/2010
you should write a second chapter to this. Lets see what the powerup you just gave to the Byakugan is D. Stands to reason, based on the stories, that whereas the Sharingans method of powerup is "Dark Guilt" or something similar, a polar opposite would be required by the Hyuuga, who's very emotional control prohibits this in the strongest of members. Lets see what you give Hinata, maybe you could turn this into an entire story (or perhaps take the idea, backtrack into canon, and do a retelling from day 1 with Hinata as a focus, or co-focus, and some upgraded eyes D)
| Subzero-Wolf chapter 1 . 1/18/2010
Five Stars! Easily five stars! Well, there ARE some grammar issues, so it's really more like four and a half, but still! Great start! Hope you make this into a series! :D
| 1WiththeButterfly chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
here, have a virtual Hi-Five
you deserve it.
this gives me epic inspiration for wrting NaruHina, and while i might not use it, so you also get cookies
best origin story for the Hyuuga/Uchiha i've read
| dogbertcarroll chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
| derp derp chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
man you can't just leave it at that :( leading us on with that last paragraph and then ending the story. not nice.
| baduqwa chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
I like the idea. You did a good job of portraying the characters along canon-lines.
| TharzZzDunN chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
I liked this a lot, it delved into the sort of lost history that few seem to try and work with anymore. Very well done.
| DoomSought chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Your back story implies that the true source of an evolved state of Byakugan would be the exact opposite of what Hiashi said.
| Ripedeath chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
If that wasn't your best work what is? That was amazing
| The Third Biker Scholar chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
love it, and you make a great point. and i would love to see your version of a byakugan powered-up, especially for hinata!
take that, you bunch of goat-kissing elders! the girl you scorned is gifted more than you ever dreamed! GO HINATA!
| Dragon Man 180 chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
Oh man, Hinata will have a super Byakugan? Sweetness! And I can totally see her as a Yuki Onna, pale and lovely! On that note... if Naruto is a kitsune, what kind of kid would they produce? I'd say a very nice golden kitsune with eyes that can gave into a person's heart and stir up their Will of Fire.
| alaskan-dracolych chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
I have seen two other stories that had the advanced Byakugan (did I spell that correctly?), and this is definitely a different premis that them. Very interesting reading. Didn't notice anything that needed correction, but then again I only did a quick read through. Very interesting way of describing how the Uchiha got the Sharingan, and the Huuga got the Byakugan. And using the old stories like that to explain, and rather logical, too. Very nice. Eagerly looking forward to the next one!
| SilentSinger948 chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
I hope to see more chapters of this story.
| Icy Dragon Flame chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
AWESOME STORY! THis actually some great potential so it should NOT be a one shot. I want to see you continue this and make a full fledge story. It's quite interesting with what you're saying and I totally agree. ENOUGH WITH THE SHARIGAN! I need to see some Hyugas with an awesome Byakugan. So I vote you continue this and make it a great story.
| Pyroclastic flow chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
Interesting...But wouldnt that mean that the Hyuuga steal light from the Uchiha? :P