Reviews for Eye Envy
Amber Pegasus chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Cool story! Two thumbs up!
the DragonBard chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Actually, the reason why the Sharingan is so powerful is obvious.

Look at the pic of the Juubi, it's eye specifically. It's a super-Sharingan with nine tomoe. I theorize it might even be the source of the Rinnegan, but that's just a theory.
the Red King chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
the 2 stories of the evolution of the Sharingan a.k.a Emoeye and the Byakugan a.k.a Metal eye was awesome i really like the thing with the woman of Fire and Ice it was really interesting D
Zankaru Zelladonii chapter 1 . 12/21/2009

AHH! This chapter read too fast!

I greatly hope you decide to continue with this, even if it does end very well for a one-shot.

Deathmvp chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
I liked this and I hope you decide to expaind on it some more.
Baughn chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
"After all, if it was as simple as sacrificing yourself instead of another, then who would really be interested in such an action?"

Well, Hinata, for one. Interesting.
hattuteline chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
It's not too bad for a start, but I don't understand how this is "original fiction." If you had written up a new world with new characters that had nothing to do with Naruto or any other existing title, then I'd call it original fiction.
deitarionSSokolow chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Another delightfully creative look into the gaps and inconsistencies in Naruto. I love it.
MlleMisanthrope chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
This was very interesting, and pleasant to read. It flowed beautifully and the ideas presented were believable. I hope you do decide to add to this. After all, Hinata's eyes were aching. I would like to see where you take this.
Bobboky chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
this story idea/start is awesome
Silver Warrior chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
this was rather well written, I liked it. Kinda a shame though it seems to be a oneshot. This could be the foundation for a pretty damn good story.
Thyrokio chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
Good work
narutos vixen chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
you should make this a full bown story or at least show what happens to hinatas eyes...
TL chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
We all want to know just where the hell it is, though I do like your idea.

If Hinata gets stronger eyes for her actions aginst Pain for Naruto...

Well all I can say is here's hopeing.
firegoat chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
oh i love this

like your writing style too :)

not too much information but enough to get what is going on.

lol this will sound spoiled but...any chance of a sequal?
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