|Reviews for Eye Envy|
| the Red King chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
the 2 stories of the evolution of the Sharingan a.k.a Emoeye and the Byakugan a.k.a Metal eye was awesome i really like the thing with the woman of Fire and Ice it was really interesting D
| Zankaru Zelladonii chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
AHH! This chapter read too fast!
I greatly hope you decide to continue with this, even if it does end very well for a one-shot.
| Deathmvp chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
I liked this and I hope you decide to expaind on it some more.
| Baughn chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
"After all, if it was as simple as sacrificing yourself instead of another, then who would really be interested in such an action?"
Well, Hinata, for one. Interesting.
| hattuteline chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
It's not too bad for a start, but I don't understand how this is "original fiction." If you had written up a new world with new characters that had nothing to do with Naruto or any other existing title, then I'd call it original fiction.
| deitarionSSokolow chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Another delightfully creative look into the gaps and inconsistencies in Naruto. I love it.
| MlleMisanthrope chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
This was very interesting, and pleasant to read. It flowed beautifully and the ideas presented were believable. I hope you do decide to add to this. After all, Hinata's eyes were aching. I would like to see where you take this.
| Bobboky chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
this story idea/start is awesome
| Silver Warrior chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
this was rather well written, I liked it. Kinda a shame though it seems to be a oneshot. This could be the foundation for a pretty damn good story.
| Thyrokio chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
| narutos vixen chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
you should make this a full bown story or at least show what happens to hinatas eyes...
| TL chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
We all want to know just where the hell it is, though I do like your idea.
If Hinata gets stronger eyes for her actions aginst Pain for Naruto...
Well all I can say is here's hopeing.
| firegoat chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
oh i love this
like your writing style too :)
not too much information but enough to get what is going on.
lol this will sound spoiled but...any chance of a sequal?
| daniel 29 chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
It's kind of depressing that this story is finished because the concept seems very unique and has an interesting question to consider also.
| The Laughing Phoenix chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
*snickers. Perhaps I am a horrible, horrible person, but it seems like it would serve Hiashi right if Hinata, who he's called a failure for much of her life, were the single Hyuuga to get a powerup. Especially if it took the willingness to sacrifice yourself for another.
Going by your version of the creation of the Byakugan, Hinata could be considered a throwback to the original wielder, the Snow Woman. She sounds a lot like Hinata in temperament, gentle, kind, and generous. Which would be further karmic smackdown for Hiashi. 'Emotional control', pft!
I really liked this one-shot. If you ever decide to go somewhere with this, then I'd love to read it.