Reviews for The HalfVampire Chronicles:Part II
alixandria chapter 8 . 9/12/2020
Is Rosalie and Jacob really going to kill Andy?
alixandria chapter 7 . 9/12/2020
I hope Andy gets arrested for what he's done to nessie please?!
alixandria chapter 6 . 9/12/2020
Calm down Jacob please? You'll be just fine..
alixandria chapter 5 . 9/11/2020
I'm glad nessie listened to Jacob about Andy.
alixandria chapter 4 . 9/10/2020
Poor nessie...
alixandria chapter 3 . 9/10/2020
What's really going on with nessie ?!
alixandria chapter 2 . 9/10/2020
Nessie needs a spanking!
alixandria chapter 1 . 9/10/2020
What's up with nessie always being in pain all the time?
Guest chapter 15 . 6/2/2018
So I dont normally review if a story is finished but I feel the need to ok n this one.
1. An imprint wouldn't be ignored.
2. He wouldn't be taking attention from anyone other than his imprint, especially with all the shot they've been through!
3. This is the third time she has been raped. You need to find another set of drama because being raped once is a life changing experience and it's not affected her once other then a little bit here and there but three times! I'm telling you fight now when you're raped you dont willing go to another mans room alone! Being raped is traumatizing!
kimberlyann1595 chapter 19 . 5/11/2017
if Renesmee and Jake got together right before she turned 16, and she's 18 now, then they couldn't have been together for 5 years now. At the same time, she shouldn't have started as a freshman at 16. but then at 18, now she's a senior about to graduate? The timeline set up in all this seems a little off. I've reread this story dozens of times and love it, don't get me wrong. there are just some continuation issues here and there. I actually read The Chronicles every time I decide to reread The Twilight Saga or rewatch the films. I have a hard time separating the two as cannonfanfiction sometimes, so I kinda say screw it and put them altogether. just wish some of the errors would be updated.
My Lord Doctor6735 chapter 30 . 1/13/2017
Ok, I just gotta say that your family is a good way! Lol!
FluffynSmutty chapter 34 . 11/23/2016
PAT2024 chapter 34 . 10/27/2016
Very nice story. I love all the hard work you've done and all the secondary characters you have created / developed and most of the story line. Nevertheless, Nessie is still very immature and too egoistical and materialistic (I was amazed when I realised you were a male writer, to see all the time spent describing her cloths/shoes, it seems you've done a lot of research, are you in the fashion business ?). I know that although physically she seems to be a grown woman, she lacks years of experience, but she was getting on my nerves more than once. I regret the lack of interactions between Nessie and her parents, she has much more relationships with her aunts and uncles... and I would have loved more supernatural stuff (Nessie developing her talent for example, close friends discovering what they truly are and their reactions, Alice doesn't predict anything, Edward doesn't bring insight in certain situations where he could have, etc..). This being said, I truly enjoyed the ride, you are a good writer (but please use a beta, they are too many misspellings) and I'm going to start the 3rd instalment ... thank you
Guest chapter 1 . 7/4/2016
I think Nessie is pregnant.
disappointed chapter 23 . 2/6/2016
The Leah fight was well told. It brings me back to how can she defeat Leah but get hurt by a human?Hopefully she maintains her current level of immortality instead of being vulnerable to human attacks.
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