Reviews for Lovely Dance
Princess Yunie chapter 1 . 4/18/2013
Awwww arigatto :3
It's awesome *w*
Treasure Family chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
I love it. Great job.
RadioBrain Walker chapter 1 . 6/24/2011
MomoSenpai8907 chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
aww that was sweet and innocent :) cute also you should of added why akito kun was so happy and why he was a dress as cute as that was lol the story could of been longer to but i liked it
kkhhkjhfgchj chapter 1 . 7/9/2010
great descriptions and images! keep it up XD
Amirrel chapter 1 . 3/9/2010
Well, on the whole, the story's's just that...grammar could have been better, though it's probably not my place to say since my grammar sucks too.

The problem is this read feels more like a lemon than a lovemaking...
anonymous chapter 1 . 3/2/2010
"he panted hard as he was streaked"

huh? i dont get this part. do you mean entered?
anonymous chapter 1 . 3/2/2010
Before a word could be utter his limp had been captured

there's a 'could' in the sentence so the word 'utter' should be in past tense - uttered.. lip. interesting story thought it is not made for the eyes of younger beings.
DPshadow chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
that was awesome :D