|Reviews for The way of the Lies|
| ncislove chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Just a few pointers:
You might want a beta - someone to edit (there are a few easy mistakes to correct)
Spacing - It's hard to read when it's all huge paragraphs.
| KatiechanXoxoXSesshoukun chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Ok I really like the begging of this is a few pointers I want to give you way the story is put you can make it go when they talk it can go into a sentence of it's own.I hope this helps a little and I can not wait to read the next is really awesome.
PLEASE UPDATE SOON
| Ncisluver chapter 1 . 12/25/2009
Wow Agreed. Only if we could c sumthin like this on the show that would b amazing. Nice job continue pls
| autumngold chapter 1 . 12/24/2009
Nice beginning to your story! Now if we could only see something like this on the NCIS show. Hope you post more soon!