|Reviews for Two People|
| Emiliya Wolfe chapter 1 . 8/2
This is a very sweet poem that definitely captures the essence of Bow and Kestrel's bond. The flow was very nice, and the crescendo was also well built.
However, I had a slight problem reading it just because it looks very samey. This is easily fixed by separating your poem into several paragraphs to make it easier on the reader, and it would add to your writing by almost turning the poem into an ode, or a ballad.
So I'd suggest making one break before "Two people held together" each time, and then "two people being torn apart" and "two people far away".
Other than that, your rhymes were terrific, and you tell the story with ease.
| BookAddictForLife chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
This is so good! I wish I could write poetry as good as you!
| Ab55556 chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
All that lives in her is the part that lives in him?
Impressive, I'm hating you for this :P
This flowed beautifully, just like Holli's writing, so I'm positive that she'll love it!
I don't know the charcaters, but I'm sure they are very IC. They sound it, as I know that the books and story is generally quite dramatic.
Well, thats the impression I get from Holli's writing anyway.
"So close that by cutting one you make the other bleed".
That was fantastic, I liked that a lot too!
One of your top poems, beautiful!
Well done Hay!
| Tiva4evaxxx chapter 1 . 12/24/2009
You know something, i really, really hate all these people who are SO DAMN GOOD AT POETRY!
It's not even fair. :P
I love Wind on Fire, i really should re read them... Oh well, no time, what with this writing lark.
I loved it... sorry holli i didn't write you anything. I'll ring you at some point :P
Anyway, yes Hay, really beautiful. If i had to use one word to describe wind on fire it would be that actually, and this fitted very well.