|Reviews for A Fox's Angel|
| MWRANDOM chapter 12 . 7h
The main plot is good as is the spelling and grammar. You have issues with many of the minor plot points however which takes quite a bit from the impact your story could have. For example, when the Hokage arbitrarily declared the Uchiha's punishment. The council was making outrageous demands and he basically overruled them and ordered his punishment as was his right as the village is at it's core a military dictatorship. The very next chapter however, he has for some reason caved to the council's pressure, reversed his sentance and declared that the Uchiha get's a public trial. As shown that would TOTALLY destroy any respect that the Hokage commands in the village rendering him impotent and nothing more than a figurehead. It totally invalidates the position and the man holding the position. You could have gotten around this if you had a scene where concessions were made to him or shown a scene where reasons that a public trial would benefit the Hokage, the Ninja Corps, or the village as a whole. As it is the Hokage went from ruler of the village to glorified village secretary in one scene. Anyway, as I've said I like the overall storyline so I'll say overall it's a decent story, it just needs some polish with the minor plot points in order to make it better.
| Naruto Fan chapter 12 . 5/30
Happy to see you writing new chapters for these entertaining stories. Keep up the good work and hopefully your personal life situation gets better too.
| Guest chapter 12 . 5/26
Can't wait for the next chapter
| Sagacious.Utilitarian.Network chapter 12 . 5/24
This a very nicely written. It was a great story. You should continue it. I give it a 8.75/10
| xxPercyRoxxx chapter 12 . 5/23
This chapter answered my previous question. Hope you can update again soon. Will Hinata ever accept she lost her chance with Naruto?
| ARSLOTHES chapter 12 . 5/22
Pretty good fic, hope you update sooner for the next chapter
| xxPercyRoxxx chapter 10 . 5/22
If Naruto 'awakened' her fully with a kiss would her loyalties change to Naruto?
| Shisarakage chapter 12 . 5/20
Saki's properly awake now! Yay! Now it's just a matter of time until we see Karinka-Chan again. Also, good to see this story update. I wish there were more good Naruto/Kurumi fics out there. This seems to be the only one, but that makes it all the more enjoyable. _
| shunshinking chapter 12 . 5/20
Loved the chapter can't wait for more
| BANKAIZEN chapter 12 . 5/20
| Guest chapter 12 . 5/20
| Ballazan chapter 12 . 5/20
Ok so i have a question here. Since Naruto awakened Kurumi and then reawakened Saki does that mean that the Steel Angel Akatsuki have are going to join the team as well? Also great going on with the story. Can't wait to see what the next chapter will bring.
| R-king 93 chapter 12 . 5/20
Excellent chapter update soon and welcomed back
| omnimon12 chapter 12 . 5/20
I'm glad that you took my advice with this story, but, I need to point out a small mistake: when you summarized the three matches that took place after the Sakura vs. TenTen match, you mentioned that Hinata had fought Neji to a draw, but then after the result of the Naruto vs. Saki match, you have her fight Neji a *second* time, all the while singlehandedly terrifying most of the people there, and this time beating him into a bloody pulp.
Aside from that, though, this chapter was definitely worth the wait. Nice one with the 'weapons-grade moé plus Yandere' bit; Fits Hinata to a T in this story.
Looking forward to the next chapter! :)
| Strife666 chapter 12 . 5/19
awesome story! i'm loving it!