Reviews for What happened the day he asked her out?
Soarer chapter 1 . 8/4/2011
The grammar in this story is atrocious. You need to make sure you're using quotation marks consistently and correctly. And the storyline is fairly mediocre. All in all, not fantastic.
studentofwords chapter 1 . 6/7/2010
I'm sorry, but that was just badly written. The grammar was horrendous, the writing style was boring, and overall the story line was unrealistic. The good news is that you have plenty of room to grow in your writing. Good luck!
hhrox chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
I'm sorry, but this story really wasn't all that great. While I'm not crazy about the story line itself, the main reason I don't like it is because it is grammatically wrong and hard to understand.