Reviews for Breathing the Unkown
rednightmare chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
It may not be a direct reference to VtM, but I like it!

You handle the descriptions very well - which is, to me, one of the most important components of being a good writer. I also really enjoyed your lead-in to the story. Anne is a believable person from the very first line, which makes your introductory paragraph all the more grabbing. Use of the present tense is serving you well, too; it makes the action all the more suspenseful.

Nice one! I hope to see more!