|Reviews for Without Seeing|
| Wicked Lovely 17 chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
loved it. :D
| CrayonsPink chapter 1 . 7/7/2011
I really liked this; the love Jake has for his brother makes me smile.
| ShoshanaFlower chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
Beautiful. I love Jake's voice - you've captured his dialog (internal and otherwise) so well. How is it you manage to write a fic in which a character does virtually nothing but contemplate fate, luck, life, and death, and still make it so completely captivating? I think that's very difficult to do - to avoid dragging on and losing the reader. But I am hooked from first line to last, and I'm left in a sort of daze wondering about the profound thoughts I've just read. I love it!
| Sothis Star1 chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
I hope you get published like you mentioned in your profile, because you're a very good writer. I'm not going to repeat the things I said about your style in my review for "with you now," but know that I enjoyed this one just as much if not more. It was very thought-provoking, and you write Jake's voice well.
| Ms. Muffet chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
Wow! What everyone else said! I look forward to reading your other stories.
| ChestnutBrumby chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
You... a seriously, a genius. no, really. I was having these same thoughts about Tom, and what would have happened if Tom had come to Pandora as he was supposed to... and to that, that Tom wouldn't have messed up, wouldn't have proven himself and wouldn't have been chosen by Eywa. And about Jake's flying dreams, you simply put it into this perfect brilliance in a way my loose trains of thought couldn't.
This was awesome. Totally, utterly, awesome.
Although... I am fairly certain when I was reading my Avatar guidebook, twins and even triplets are possible :)
| Crimson Masquerade chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
I LOVE this! Such a deep and thoughtful introspective, and Jake is so convincing and well-written. I really like the way you tied Jake's thoughts about Tom and the past into his future with Neytiri. Very touching, great job!
| sharkflip chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
Thank goodness - an Avatar fic that has Jake talk like a marine, not a fangirl. Nice musing, as well, and lovely reaction from Neytiri, too.
| James R. O'Neill chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
This is great. I liked the PoV, too. And I think using present tense was good for this story. 5/5.
| Fang Cullen chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Wow...wow. -walks away contemplating life-
| KTHunter chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Oh, Wow. I love the way you wrote this. It flows so well! Definitely faving this one. I saw the movie the night it came out, and I loved it. This is a great way to give Jake's character more depth. I'm setting an author alert in case you post more.
| Lasaire chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
My god, brilliant. The best of all the Avatar fics out there, by far. It's such a real, nuanced look at human brooding and melancholy. Favorite quote:
"Letting her see what a wreck she’d taken on after all, after having spent all that time trying to convince her I could learn, that I could be strong and whole, like her."
I really love that it shows Jake and Neytiri actually navigating a real relationship, not just the 'fated love' the movie portrays.
| Xeal II chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
Good work. This is unique among the Avatar fics in its exploration of Jake's view. Externally he seems very much like a Na'vi, but his mind is still human. He may embrace the tribal culture but he cannot exorcise his human point of view entirely. You capture that fact well. He deals with Tom's voice in his own questioning manner. Neytiri's ability to -understand- things is accepted but never entirely grasped. This would be a natural thing for any human put into such an alien situation. Excllent job capturing that. Also, your story has a slightly cynical take on Jake's character which I believe to be very accurate.
| Padme Nijiri chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Very good Categorizing-Spiritual and Angst. I think with a little more on Tom I would have cried.
I think that twins have to run on the maternal side for there to be identical twins...
| Dracaspina chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Yes! You correctly used fubar! (As an army brat, I have a soft spot for military jargon.)