|Reviews for A War Apart|
| hughfj08 chapter 23 . 10/17/2011
have to say, after reading A War Apart, I am now allowed to comment on it.
Turthfully, I loved it.
Definitely the best work I have read online so far.
The writing style suited me perfectly and scuked me right into the story.
Was a fan of Cristoph's end as well, felt a little bad as I liked his character, but a mental breakdown was great.
Also liked slipping in Hawke at the end.
Didn't see that until Lash was mentioned in the closing section.
And yes, you are on author alert now.
Looking forward to reading your other work
| solar065 chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
This story is brilliant. That is all.
| Cstan chapter 23 . 6/25/2011
This was one helluva story. You could feel with the characters you understood (even if you didn't agree) with their points of view, their thoughts and motivations.
What made it additionally so captivating was the reality: you didn't shy around the death and destruction caused by an all-out war. Civilians were dragged in and slaughtered, you didn't put on rose-colored glasses and I congratulate you on that.
I have to admit that it was only during the last part of the last chapter that I realized that Tanner was Hawke.
Good luck with future stories, fan-fiction and original.
| Nuctemeron chapter 23 . 3/4/2011
(Warning: shameless amounts of spoilers here)
I was in denial that Calciki was the climax up until the scene in the Green Earth HQ was resolved; I was secretly hoping that Green Earth would regroup or that the story would just shift focus to the Yellow Comet front. But then 2 chapters later it was over. Why? Why do all the good things come to an end so abruptly?
The reason I'm so distraught after the conclusion is because this story is a gem. I spend a (depressingly large) chunk of my free time on this site, sifting through all manner of stories, and this is definitely the best I've come across. The narrative style is consistent, dialogue and character interaction is realistic; the writing itself is spot on.
The way you've interpreted wars world itself deserves credit too.
I'll admit I was skeptical of Christoph in the very beginning. Most OC protagonists are usually just thrown in to shamelessly gratify the author's ego, by either being mary-sues or (at the very least) by flirting successfully with the hottest character. Christoph was just a regular guy who had his hometown blown up; and even though he did act a bit over-the-top in some instances (personally shooting that black hole guy in the beginning, trying to shoot that pilot in Loch Haven, and randomly running into the enemy HQ), he was still a good, believable character. I totally sympathized with him.
Congrats bro, you've done it. You've written a memorable fanfiction.
| Rodney Eve Yendor chapter 23 . 2/22/2011
oh yeah i was stupid and forgot about how the games were and max was os duh :P
| Rodney Eve Yendor chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
just so you know i love it oh and max is blue moon not Os
| AlphaOmega92 chapter 23 . 1/22/2011
A great story! After a long absence from reading after you took your semester abroad to China, I picked up this story again. I love the realism you've brought to War World, and the characterization of the game's characters. Your original characters are also top-notch, and I have a soft spot for tragic characters like Christolph. I expected his death, but I was betting (and maybe hoping) that it was Sami that put him down, after he shoots Eagle. But I like to shake up the worlds I write fanfictions for, as evidenced by my Fallout and Advance Wars works. You've inspired me to return to my own work, and I'll continue to follow yours in the future.
| MessengerOfDreams chapter 22 . 1/12/2011
Hello. And thank you.
Why, you ask? Because this story was a real gift.
I'll admit, I'm the first to think writing fanfictions is something for geeks, or at least I was. I'd get bored of people posting OMG SamiXEagle stories and other such things. But you proved to me that you don't have to be a guy who hentai's characters, pardon my french, to write fanfiction. And this is a great example of fanfiction outsiders would read and enjoy. In fact, you could be a license away from making this a real book. :)
I'd like to say you inspired me, because now I'm going to try my hand at fanfiction. Being a growing writer before this, I have a feeling that while not much of my work would be serious publishing material as my real-life based work would be, I will grow a lot from this and enjoy it just as much.
So yeah, this is both a review and a thank you. Your story is among the most epic I've read.
Best of Luck!
| presidentuziel chapter 23 . 12/30/2010
Absolutely loved this story, you did a very good job in making it seem 'real'. To be honest, I felt that this fic captured what I was hoping to get in DS, much more gritty and down to Earth. Good job.
| Rinle chapter 19 . 12/27/2010
Christoph disturbs me greatly. O.o I mean, he's always been disturbing from the very start, but this is just a whole new level. (I get the strongest feeling that he's going to die before the end.)
Sami makes me feel so sad. Also, I liked that little scene with Max and Eagle.
Great chapter, as usual. XD
| DormantAnomaly chapter 19 . 12/25/2010
Just wanted to let you I'm still following your story :)
That firefight was very nicely done btw, it definitely brought a sense of havoc and intensity. Can't wait to find out how the battle at Calciki will end for both Christoph and Sami.
| Legomech chapter 18 . 12/8/2010
This story is so excellent that I signed up just to add a review. I sincerely hope you complete the tale, as it was a compelling read and one of the best fan fictions I've ever read. Thanks for sharing your work with us!
| presidentuziel chapter 17 . 9/7/2010
How could this have been the last chapter in TWO MONTHS? This is one of the best fanfictions I've ever read, and that is NOT praise I give out freely. I wanna know what happennnnns! Hell, you've got me wanting to write in the little post-DS world you have running...
| presidentuziel chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
Fan. Tas. Tic. Normally I go into deep critiques and reviews for this sorta thing, but I can't think of anything that should be changed. Cept maybe it dragged a little in the middle, but you got Max and the rest of it just spot on.
| DormantAnomaly chapter 17 . 8/7/2010
Another job well done, keep them coming and congratz on getting over 100k word count :)