|Reviews for Hinata in Wonderland?|
| maximotheone on psp chapter 1 . 1/28/2011
interesting keep it up
| I'm a Blank Sheet chapter 1 . 4/9/2010
I like the plot and story-line although...
Just a suggestion though and not meant to inflict any harm or some kind of insult in any way...
It's just that you're too fast with the happenings and events and to tell you the truth, I was a bit confused as the time there just seems to fly by since you skipped a lot of parts and even got to the point where in one chapter Hinata already encounters the Queen.. not that I'm saying you should really follow what I say since it is your story and not mine. What I'm trying to say is add a little more detail with the story, some more characters and descriptions.. I'm not the perfect writer myself and I want to improve on that... so yeah...
I'll be counting on the next chapter really soon!
| xAngel-of-Hellx chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Pretty cool first chapter
LOL especially the squirrel part, hehe squirrels XD
Ignoring my little brain that is stuck on squirrels (hehe squirrels) please update soon X3