|Reviews for Journey To The Center Of The Mind|
| jdeldulin chapter 1 . 12/30/2009
What interested me is not the trip itself, but Lucemon's emotions during it. He obviously has a history with his most powerful form (I forget what that thing is called... "Satan mode" or some such thing?), and the fact that he's somehow better is a good thing. I'd like to read the other stories involving this particular portrayal of Lucemon.
That being said, some of the dialogue was a little awkward. You might want to work on making it flow a bit more smoothly and make the characters say things that sound like real-life dialogue.
"'Yes, the trip seemed amazing, though, it’s a powerful emotional experience, you need to open your mind, and calmly appreciate it,' Lucemon said in that calm boyish voice of his. 'I’m willing to try it again'" is what brought my attention to this the most. Overall, though, good story. I look forward to reading more. :)