Reviews for Punisher chapter 1 . 10/5/2011
its a great fic
BLAKKSTONE chapter 1 . 1/8/2010
Interesting idea. Punisher versus a psychic.

It could have used more development though.

More background on the villain, more detail on action scenes, the places, the characters, more description. Time of day, etc...Even some background on the Punisher. Imagine someone who has never read Punisher comics, played the games or seen the movies. Why would he care about this character and this story?

It lacks build up and depth, it lacks tension.

Also, when writing dialogue, it's easier on the readers when you change lines at each spoken line.


"Who are you?" asked the man.

"My name is so-and-so," answered the other person.

Good idea, needs work.