Reviews for Naruto, the next Shinigami Shinobi Meister
kat1017 chapter 5 . 5/4
Tsubaki has called Lord death in the series, remember black star was her Meister so she had to be the responsible on in her team/partnership with him.
dragonbuster117 chapter 12 . 5/1
I love this story so far, but you had Naruto fight Dosu. I thought that you had that whole team killed?
Diomar Lord Dimitri chapter 1 . 4/24
Guest chapter 18 . 4/21
Your writing style is really bad you keep interrupting the chapters and are skipping parts of the story all together the plot idea is good but the execution needs a lot of are plot holes all over the story my suggestion would be to rewrite the story and take your time doing so to make it perfect
dragonbuster117 chapter 1 . 2/25
The idea seems like a good one for a story and especially good for a crossover; however, your grammar has a lot of room to improve. For starters, you put multiple speakers in one paragraph when there should be a new paragraph for every time the speaker changes. Secondly, your writing seems too fast paced. This chapter should have been at least twice as long if written correctly. I'm sorry if you have already changed this for later chapters, but if you have, you should consider editing this chapter. The first chapter gives the reader an impression of your work, much like when you met a new person you judge them, even if you don't mean to, by their appearance. If the summary doesn't draw the reader to the first chapter, and/or the first chapter casts a bad light on the story and may keep the reader(s) from reading the rest of the story. I just wanted to give some parting advice, even if you don't see this.
Guest chapter 4 . 1/20
heh heh, the old "I'll do anything", works every time. Especially with ninja fangirls.
Guest chapter 2 . 1/20
Now THAT'S how you get a point across in a ninja village. WITH EXTREME PREJUDICE! Cause damn, those people are too stupid to get it another way.
Guest chapter 2 . 11/20/2015
The scarecrow
Bloodzone15 chapter 4 . 11/18/2015
No anything but a Walter fart.
Nero Z Reaver chapter 2 . 9/27/2015
Something smells fishy with the guest reviews here,are you sure those were not yours along with some of the account reviews? just saying. The story's good buuut, yeah, it could've been better with a few(?) alterations with the character conversations and kind of like the whole fic itself,it is a good story but really, i think its kind of rushed since chapter 1 and so forth, you should ask for a beta reader's help to alter the story a bit or,maybe even do a remake of the whole thing, but all in all, it was a good but kind of a rushed story, though there is more room for improvement in the future(or the next time you feel like writing another fic,haha) keep writing and just keep on improving dude! :D
oh awesome one chapter 18 . 6/20/2015
Loves this sooo cute the ending!
lou2003us chapter 18 . 5/14/2015
I really want to see what happens next!

Looking forward to next chapter.

Keep up the great work!
Guest chapter 7 . 5/13/2015
I thought it was great and amazing but could you make more chapters and make it longer please
Guest chapter 2 . 4/26/2015
Chapter 2 is cool!
Master Xehanort chapter 18 . 4/8/2015
this is great so keep going my friend.
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