Reviews for Minnie the babysitter
scoutmasterkb28 chapter 1 . 12/13/2010
It's a nice idea about Minnie becoming a babysitter. I find it quite funny in the end of the story XD.

But there are a few punctuation errors here. Especially the usage of double commas("", i don't it's really called). And about the speech in the story, it's better to make a paragraph for each speech eg,

"Well what won me or the ice cream?"

"I don't believe it, but you!"

"Ha, told you!"

"But, that's only because you done your homework yesterday, or should I say a ?"

"Errr...,dad,"

"What?"

"Hi."

" MINNIE!"

The readers will see it a bit neater than a clump of jumbled up for readeing my review.