|Reviews for Unwelcome|
| Alardem chapter 1 . 1/9/2010
Sweet, good to see you putting this story on this site! :)
I have to admit that I am not a competent critic by any stretch of the imagination, but then again your story is simply that well-written. The language is sophisticated yet simple enough for the reader to easily absorb without feeling as though they're getting crit for 9001 damage by a Wall Of Text.
Also, we need more stories that focus on the horrifying effects of Alma's presence on the ordinary people in the haunted Auburn district, rather than having stories where she angsts or stories about tough guys shooting tougher guys.
Keep it up. :)
| Elizabeth Daughter of Ares chapter 3 . 1/5/2010
Now It's getting better :] I hope you update tomorrow maybe today if i'm lucky enough and you have the time either way I'll still be reading and waiting...
| Condor green chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
Glad to see that you have started writing again.
I really enjoyed where you took your last story and i can't wait to see where you will take this.
Just a few questions that will probably be answered in the next chapter anyways.
Will the other characters in FEAR 1 or 2 play a prominent role in this?
How long will you estimate this will be?
| Elizabeth Daughter of Ares chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
I like it...I can't wait til you update again, I hope it's soon.